by kingkey
Wish you hadn't stopped the story where you did. You realize that by doing so you are obligated to write a chapter 3, right? I look forward to reading it, especially since I am a retired Marine.
Great start. I hope that you finish the story and do not just stop as far too many do .
I think you have the beginnings of a great story going but I wish you would have thought about putting the first 2 chapter together as one, or maybe even putting the third chapter you mentioned with them. I've given both chapter 5 stars because I like your storyline.
I'll be waiting for chapter 3. You develop your characters extremely well.
I'm glad I came late though. One page at a time becomes tedious.