All Comments on 'The Night of His Arrival'

GROW UP

you need to go back and retitle these stories ALL CHAPTERS OF A SERIES HAVE TO HAVE THE SAME TITLE so go back and do it properly or remove them

DBRS

This is just as poorly written as the first one, but this sequel didn't live up to the anticipation you tried to portray in the first story, so it was also disappointing in content. I don't have a problem with the different titles, but I do think if you write what is intended to be a series of sequels, it makes sense to give them the same title with chapter numbers. You can subtitle them with the chapter number if the titles you have are important to you. Of far more concern, though, is the poor quality of your work. I don't normally give such harsh criticism without giving encouragement for other aspects of the story, but I just can't find anything.