All Comments on 'The Night Shift'

Finish the story and it might be worth reading. I don't understand why authors post a half-assed start to what could be a decent story.

This story sounds really familiar. Have you posted this before?

I just checked your profile and saw that you submitted the exact same story only with the title "Late Shift" on Nov. 1st. I knew I'd read it before. Oh well, it was a pleasure to read again! Very nice.

I enjoyed what there was of the story, but I also thought that the finish left a little to be desired. There's also something that, personally, I would have added. When a uniform consists of a very short skirt, there's something else to provide extra "coverage" for the waitress, usually pantyhose or tights of some sort. That would added a hot little "touch" to the story, too. Either way, keep trying and you'll get it right, eventually.

This story could be extended, showing the rest of the other nites' activities, with your shop girl wanting to have your baby....

This is the same story as the one titled "Late Shift".

Why not repost one and make the female a black girl?