All Comments on 'The Perfect Game'

One of the best game tales I’ve read since I began lurking before joining LR. Well done mate, and thanks.

Believe that you need to take a class to learn all the rules of that game

I first read this story over a decade ago. I have read many Literotica stories since, and have forgotten most of them. This one I remembered by name. So I returned to read it again this week. It has aged very well. Is it the most realistic? No. Is it the most sympathetic to all participants? No. Is it the hottest? I think so. Why is it so hot? If I knew, I would be writing stories like this and sweeping all the competitions.

Superb story, deftly paced and wonderfully described... so.... this is me asking nicely.... please write the rest?

Best game story with nice anticipation and build-up

As a game? No.

Too many parts. Too randomly revealed.

A frog will notice the change in water temperature and hop out. Fact. If you don't believe me then go and find out yourselves. I have never heard of the get 2 drinks in to women and they will become lesbian but maybe it's just true in America. People from other countries read lit, and with this story don't waste time with a game, pass the roofied drinks to the women!!. As the protagonist wants to screw the friend and the girlfriend's 18 year old sister, job done. The end becomes a bit of un English sex farce!! Totally hilarious. Tres Bien.!!

Mmmmm … so hot! I’m so juicy! Excuse me for a few before I read Chapter 2.

Mmmmm … so hot! I’m so juicy! Excuse me for a few before I read Chapter 2.

My only critique is that a bit build up between Dave and Beth would've been good 🤗

🌟 🌟 🌟 🌟 🌟

Sexy. Just what I want from a Literotica story.

And well written and edited so few reading stops to ruin the story.

Well done!

Bill S.

All that staging and intros really made it.

One of the best stories I have read, clever, subtle and raunchy. Well done!

What a great game, the gradual build was fantastic as clothes and inhibitions fell towards a mutual fuck fest

This story is the best thing to come out of Texas.

There are a lot of people that can write something, but there’s are writers and there are story tellers, You Tex are a Story Teller!!

A nice story! Thank you!

Dave

Were can i buy the game at you can contact me at billymontgomery11@yahoo.com

Caught a few glitches -- a couple instances of "you're" when you meant "your" and one "Debbie" when I'm sure you meant "Denise". But in general, a tale developed and executed well, as usual!

Great story. Please write the follow-up.

Oh please write the follow up, and include Beth's roommate at a later stage. I.E. she arrives looking for Beth but gets drawn into the game, and can't end it there.

This was a truly great story that elicited some delicious memories and fantasies in me. I dated identical twin sisters for a few months in college, and though I never had sex with either of them, I did have some wicked fantasies. Maybe I'll write them down some time. Thanks for a 5-star story.

Oh how I wish I could play that game.

p5

Loved it! Best story ever!!!

My wife and I loved your story. She loves how playful (no pun intended) your stories are. We wish we could purchase your game. Where is part 2?

Love the story!

I would also love a copy of that game!

Do you have a fully detailed write up of the game, altogether? Could you post one?

On Page 5, you have a typo (...Debbie helped her guide me to the bathroom...). I think you meant Denise.

Very very good story, nicely narrated. Continue feeding us with such interesting and

pleasure giving stories on different themes.

Debated long & hard with myself about the score for this story. 4 or 5? In the end, the sheer inventiveness of the game itself and the build up of tension and pacing during the first half of the story won out. Being nit-picky, for me the move from the big deal of showing naked flesh to acceptance that everyone could screw one another (with the exception of Cheryl's initial reluctance of Beth & Alex) was way too quick. The more believable the story, the more enjoyable for me.

The sex was also a bit too long winded and Denise went from not being able to take any more in her sore ass to seeking out Alex's cock with her a-hole moments later. Minor criticisms aside, it was a very enjoyable read and I'm looking forward to seeing how things develop in the next installments. Thanks for your hard work & sharing your imagination and invention with an appreciative audience.

I want a copy of that game for the wife and and friends

Very nice.... Want a copy of the game.... Please... Yes write the story

I hardly ever finish stories over r pages but this one kept me the whole time, I am going to steal your game haha

Can I buy that game off you? Seriously. Make a copy for me for a couple of hundred??

I have read many stories on this site and others. This story held my attention (and erection) for almost the entire tire I read it. Well written. Can I buy the game somewhere since I am sure by now someone has mass produced it.

Made me cum.... a few times ;)

I'm asking very nicely - please write it :)

A favorite from someone today who had this on their list of faves. Made me miss my friend, so I read it again.

I hereby request a continuance of this enthralling tale.

Or you could all get naked jump in a pile and play "who do you trust"? !!!

I definitely wanna play

Your imagination and skilled narrative are amazing..

My husband used that word just yesterday to describe the way our friends' dog made onto his lap. Incremental gets my vote. (If my vote matters, I mean. 8-)

Even on a third read it works wonders. Would love to be in that game.

The best thing I've read on here. Believeable and intelligently written. Left me horny as hell.

I absolutely loved it! You've got me thinking of how I could get my friends to play this

I'm a recent fan but you simply out did your self in this one. I thought CnS was great but this one takes the cake. When that game goes on the market please let me know I'd love to buy it!! I can't wait to read the next chapters! Great job!

I can understand why you made the hall of fame. Absolutely breathtaking

I know you stated at the beginning of the story that it would be slow. While I would have the tendency to agree with you, it was still a fantastic read!

As for the game itself, one of your reviewers said that you should market that game...... I concur! If not market, send me a copy of the cards as I've got a group of friends that would LOVE to play that game!

Anyways, here's to hoping that all is well with your little endeavor and that the fervor your game has created continues to rise!

Loved it can not wait to read the next 2 chapters

I luv this one ,, it kept me wanting to keep on reading even after I was tired an couldn't keep my eye lids open ,,,,,,,,,,,,,, your a very good writer an please where do yu live so I could come an play it to ,,,,,,,,,,,, or better yet put it out there where everyone can get it ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, yes thoses of us who live up in here in Alaska ,,,,,,,,,,,,, where we would play it for weeks on in ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, because we are snowed in

anyway like I said luv it an thank-you for sharing it ,,,,,,,,,,,,,, an please another story :)

I know it's straight guys (and supposedly straight girls), but I was really left wanting some bi male sex at the end. If girls get drunk, they all become bisexual (and somewhat incestuous) but the guys stick poker-rod straight without even a little give?

As a bisexual woman myself, I really enjoyed most of it, even if Dave and Alex were irritating people. It was really hot.

You need to put that game up for sale. And in the meantime, where do you all live? I'd like to join in the game!!! :)

Picking the players without nobody falling out would be hard but fun

suspected he is

This is the hottest story I have read on this site.

Please write some more and include Beth's roommates to give the right ratio.

what a hot and sexy story. I had to go have sex with my girlfriend after reading this..... now she's reading it! when is the game going to be for sale?

Best name for the game of those mentioned is Incremental to my mind. Also, ménage is not the term you were searching for, I think. Personally I think Melange works pretty well without giving the game away.

The double standard of lesbianism but no guy on guy is is a little annoying. Obviously straight women suddenly turn into lesbians, but the guys remain absolutely straight... I find it a little odd. But still, a very entertaining story.

for some reason the previous link had a space in the middle of it

http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/607316

It annoyed me so much that there were three'hot' girls who were gagging to have sex with one guy who was really into him self and the girls didn't care that he slept with all of them in under an hor, while the other guy got no look in. Hopefully this isn't true because if my boyfriend had sex with me my friend and my SISTER in one night I would be livid especially since he said the sister was 'sexy' but the sex meant nothing to him, he is just an annoying character who is so arrogant. I want the hkur I spent reading this back!

If anyone could come up with the perfect way to market this game it would pay off huge. I didn't know how the story would unfold but it made me want to go out and buy this game today.

The slow build up got me so wet and when the sex began I was just rubbing my clit and fucking myself with my vibrator I have never come that hard before but this story.oh man.my nipples where rock hard and and my pussy was so damn tight after this story I spent over all 7 hrs bouncing on my boyfriends dick and I got double penetrated after reading that I cannot explain what it did to me but man I need to be fucked more so please god help me cos my pussy is so fucking tight and one dick just isn't enough!!!!

I thought I'd let you and your fans know that I've just finished making a party game based on this and a few similar concepts. If anyone would like to, it can be played for free on NewGrounds at the link below.

http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/607316

If you like the game, please rate. Thank you.

absolutely incredible story

I just hope this is true... Since I'm going to try it, I'm going to try making my own game.

fantastic. Cannot wait to read the next section.

Who the fuck is Debbie? Page 5 "Debbie helped her guide me to the bathroom..."

Completely sublime!! I love it!!! Please write another to follow it. Also, where might I be able to pick up a copy of this game?? ;)

read this story in intervals and orgasmed many time. Thank you

I can't remember ever having voted or commented on a story before, but this was the shit. Had me painfully hard by page 3. I would love to get a hold of the final version of the game.

Maybe the best story I've ever read in terms of really building up the anticipation. The mechanic of the game is a stroke of genius.

This is fantastic! Great job!

Easily the best if not the best I've read.

Great characters, story development, amazing sex and I think most importantly, length. Not too long, not too short, never too much detail, never too little. Just right, thank you!

I WOULD BUY THIS GAME IF YOU SOLD IT!!!

This story was amazing, it seems such a simple idea but it was just... wow

I think this story was just great and i woould really like to see it in a movie.... try selling the story to digital playground..... riley steel would be hot as beth haha

I would rather have the story of the same genre but only one guy with many ladies.

Good work though!

In the world with the internet we, the fans, can collaborate to creat the decks of cards, post them to an internet site and print them for ourselves.

a] Someone better than me at computers sets up the required site that allows others to access it and type in suggested cards. And posts the address here. Note that some cards are already provided by the text.

b] The fans go to the site and enter their ideas. The fans rate the ideas.

c] Someone edits the final sets and creats the final list for easy downloading.

d] Someone could have done the art work for the special and other cards. Also the spinner art layout. Etc.

e] Each of us fans can download the completed attachment and print it on our own computers.

What do you all say ???

This is still the best story I've read on this site. I've read it a dozen times and it's still just as hot as the first time. Any chance of a fourth chapter?? Like so many others before me, I too would like some more info on getting a copy of 'the game'. Fantastic story by a fantastic author

You need to make some version of this to sell. I'd buy one for sure!

excellent! the best i've read in a long time, the innocent yet steamy build up kept me in suspense from the beginning untill the very end .

This was an awesome story about an awesome idea. I've fantasized myself about this exact thing happening, but didn't know how to pull it off. Is there any way you'd be willing to share the game with me? Iplayeadg4@yahoo.com. Thanks again for a great story!

awesome story. can i get this game somehow? please email mnm_343@hotmail.com

Oh my god - loved the story, and love the sound of the game.

Is there anywhere i can get this game. Am happy to pay for it.

Please email me jasen.martin@bdo.co.nz

Build up was great, not the least bit boring. I love the complexity, it's obvious you gave lot of thought to your work. Also very realistic emotions. Would love to see more chapters, the more players involved the merrier. Thank's for a good read.

as with previous comments, the slow buildup is what really gets me hot. Once the fucking started, it was just another sex story. I enjoyed it a lot!

this game would come in handy this weekend

Can't wait to read the next 2. Similar to the D&D story I read on the site. However this included much more people and MORE SEX. I guess Beth thinks that practice makes perfect LOL, but no one can be perfect so we just try HARDER and HARDER to become it.

If only I had a game like this.

I came twice reading this superb story and probably would have gone for a third had I started reading before four AM.

The exquisitely teasing long build featured some of the best writing I've seen in quite a while. Though I'm sad to say that it declined somewhat from there, especially through the painful camping story, I'm still impressed and overjoyed to have found this piece.

Thank you.

Fantastic. Period.

I really enjoyed the long drawn out aspect of the story; it was like a slow sensuous strip tease. It only got boring when the game stopped and the wam bam sex, the tease, the anticipation was gone. And you never said what the winner got? Also the part about the jack hammer never dying penis pounding till it hurt, made mine begin to hurt and brought in painful feelings rather than the enjoyment previously( too much emphasis on causing pain brought thoughts of pain).

An innocent game with lots of potential. A wonderful game it's impossible to lose. I enjoyed it a lot, and missed my dinner! Since my Beth is the only one home right now, I guess I'll go get dessert. Thanks for the story.

That was great my hubby found your story yesterday while I was at work and told me I had to read it. Can't wait to read the next chapters thanks for a great story.....

and after the marvelous cum, my girlfriend woke up and screw my brains out 'til morning...thanks to you

this is by far the best story i've read so far. on this site or anywhere else. have to thank you too, since letting my wife read it got me the wildest sex ever with her ...

Loved this story, incredibly well-written, perfect pace. Well done!

Except I could have done without the porn movie ending. It felt to me like a different (and less sensitive, less crafted) writer took over shortly after everyone went to the bedroom together.

If you're still doing edits, by the way, Debbie, who makes a cameo appearance at shower-time, should probably go :-)

hard all the way

I loved this story as it hits close to home. I am one of a group of six who get together regularly to play games, often of the adult variety. There is always a ton of flirting, innuendo, groping, etc. and I know a few of us have been looking for ways to explore further. Now, I am not gay, but I would have appreciated it a little more if Dave and Alex didn't wimp out on their kiss. In a situation like that, it would've been nice to see the guys have to step up even remotely to keep the mood going. But I also understand a lot of people may be turned off by such a thing. Great story though. I wish the game were real, so I could bring it to my group.