All Comments on 'The Pit'

Its your story and you can write it anyway you want. However in my opinion it is a rather long and wordy introduction to a rather transparent story.

I think you did a nice job of the build up but left out the story. To many stories just go straight to sex without the buildup. If you planned on more chapters thats fine but I believe you should have had more chapters in this story. It has posibilities that could have been expressed in this segment without dropping it without any story. I hope to see more from you. You do a good job of it.

your story was suppose to be about incest/taboo if that was the case where is the incest? where is the taboo? where is the sex at? your story had no heat and no point.

don't let the others get to you. this was a good way to start. I enjoyed it.

ignore the morons that want instant Grope and Fuck..

You're on the right track...

Please continue the story please!