by Useli
Your ability to create a story, build characters, the sorrow ring terrains and environment is phenomenal, it makes it easy for my minds eyes to actually see the story happening. I don't know why you stopped but I want you to know that you're a great writer, you're not perfect just like every other human out there but you're really good. You need an experienced editor to help in your weak areas Please help us find where you publish so we can locate you, I bet you improved in leaps and bounds. It's 2022 now, imagine the progress you must have made since 2015. You're amazing👍👍
Story is incomplete
It is also immensely irritating. You never answer any questions, just continually make more and then you abandon the story. I usually mentally wish horrible things writers that do this. Too bad we can't flag abandoned stories so that others wouldn't waste their time on writers who can't finish what they start.
Get an editor. You aren't the worst but the errors detract
once again a good story started and not finished . That seems to happen a lot on here
dam another great story left unfinished willl be checking back keep up good work
the dialogue is too confusing at times and I don't know's actually doing the talking and who is making a facial expressions or whatever.
coming from a grammar/spelling natzi this is one of the few stories I've read in my life, that I don't even care about the mistakes, because I'm so in love with the story. Thank you for sharing your talent, and I hope you continue this story some day.
Have you ever noticed that the worst critics never leave their name? Do they lack the courage of their convictions?
Wonderful story. While I agree you could use editor help, you're not anywhere near as bad as some others I have read on LIT. Please continue these stories!!
I personally like the story maybe an editor would be good but all in all its a great read and easy to understand
no idea how you managed to get so many red Hs.
completely unreadable.