- NonHuman
- The Prototype Ch. 02
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All Comments on 'The Prototype Ch. 02'
by MrPezman
- 10 Comments
Anonymousover 16 years agoA very thought provoking story or is it?They will never live forever,but then who does?
Anonymousover 16 years agoWhen I read the first chapter I thought that this would attract all sorts of comments,your opening sentance proves me right.I have a background which invoved flying very advanced aircraft at extrene altitudes,I also have been involved in electronics and nuclear theory for 30 years.This submission ot yours is excellent,it is a forecast of things to come.Well done,and thanks for having the courage to write it.
Anonymousover 16 years agobut the story didn't quite fully succeed. but I give the author the benefit of the doubt, because it is such a short story. <p>
this 4-page story reminds me of a full-length science fiction book a read about 10 years ago, about a recalcitrant hero whose starship's supercomputer, which ran the ship's impossibly complex algorithms --- a supercomputer he named a woman's name and gave it a woman's soothing voice --- created itself the woman whose voice the lonely man had been hearing throughout his lonely traveling. <p>
but even at a full length novel of over 300 pages, that author did not even go as far as bringing the woman out of its computational interface; the guy's merely seeing her on the screen, like Baily first saw Amy in the Prototype the first time he started asking the computer to do things...
bignsassy818almost 16 years agoIt was Brilliant and the last part was unexpected.. Well done!
DesideriaPanteraalmost 14 years agoI love this story! The whole scenario is utterly fabulous and something NEW! Thank you for publishing this on Literotica! I enjoyed every word!
disableddanover 10 years agoLove the plot twist at the end.... I would never have guessed it would come out like that.
Anonymousover 10 years agoyup I have to agree I didn't see that ending coming. Well done kudos to the author.
Anonymousabout 9 years agoSo he's basically masturbating into his PC? I could be wrong, but I don't think computers like having sticky liquids secreted in them. If she really is a robot then ejaculating inside her is not a good idea lol
Simpleman1951over 7 years agoExcellent story. Thank you. Both chapters held my attention to the fullest.
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