by kiwiwolf
It was nice to see an update. I need to start keeping notes with all the stuff going on. Looking forward to the meeting of the clans (so to speak)
I've loved both the real estate, and the capo, series. You write very well. The only "criticism" I can offer, and it is a small one, is the recurring use of "buddy" and "baby", expressions of this sort. You write dialog very well, but I find myself disjointed by both sides of a conversation ending sentences with buddy or baby.
As I said, tis a very small criticism. I have truly enjoyed your writing.
I have re read what I wrote and I have to agree with you. Many thanks for pointing this out. It's easy to get into a rut when writing this sort of thing and that's what I did with the pet names.
Again... thanks for the heads up!
Kiwiwolf
I check Literotica regularly to see if you have posted anything new. I always enjoy your stories. You remain one of my favorite Lit authors. Thank you!
I love both the real estate and capo series and am glad to see that you are going to inter connect them. Thank you , and look forward to the next chapter.
I loved the story as it progressed,but was disappointed to find there isn't an ending, like reading a book that has the last chapter torn out of it(or chapters). Pleas finish it!
I love novels that beside the sexual content actually also has a plot. Your stories a excellent, but I miss an ending to "The Real Estate Connection"... the final showdown with Mr. Simmons and clearing up all the loose ends (Glenn and Manny, etc).
I agree with the other comment, your story is terrific and just begs for completion. i realize it has been a while since your last chapter but I sincerely hope you will come back to it.
I also would love to see an extension of this story but, given the length of time since the last installment, I fear that "Kiwiwolf" has ceased to write. I only hope that this halt is temporary and, failing that, that it is not due to some unfortunate circumstance.
Great story I hope you come back and finish the story with a good ending if not then you suck as an Author like a lot of them on here
Great story. I would buy this in kindle form. It just needs a ending.
I have read all 8 chapters ... loved but wtf happens next???
You have a good ability to tell a story - keep it up
just two things I noticed - chapter 1 I think I noticed TAIL instead of TALE
and this chapter SAT IN came out as SATIN
easy mistakes to make - no worries
well done - 5 star read
Being ex military with an intel background, this story really appealed to me. It is unfortunate that the author has not continued or concluded it. What a disappointment to your fans! One more chapter could provide a wrap-up.
There is an end. You need to read educating-the-capo-chapters 3 & 4 to find the end to this story.