All Comments on 'The Sales Clerk'

to a pair of brothers and treated in as cruel a manner as they have treated their victim.

After wnich they should be handcuffed together in a cage in a public place, naked on a cold winter day.

There is nothing too bad to do to rapists.

The story idea was good but who is Marcy?

impersonating human beings.

Yeah, who is Marcy? You (and others) need to proof-read your material for errors before submitting them.

sure do hate the thought of corporal punishment for a willing (to a degree) girl. But She (Don-Donna TV/TG/TS??)

would love to take any male out for a strapping, freeze to death in the cold then tar and feather before running out of town on a rail. Did I miss anything??

True some better proofing would help, but he had told the other sales girl that Tracey would not be back to work that afternoon then all of a sudden she will be working - unfair to say the least. I don't think mis-handling a salesclerk is a serious enough crime for a life time sex slave. Score raised to counter DONny's score.

Here is a couple that should be handed over to a group of brothers?????

Fucking dumb ass crackerz. Eat a dick! Don-Donna

I LOVE BIG BREASTED GIRLS I LOVE TO HANDLE THEM SUCK AND FLIK THOUSE NIPPLES AND GIVE A LOVE BIT I LOVE IT MAN.

WRITE SOME MORE ABOUT BREAST HANDLING .

Hope this continues. Hot without being vulgar.

Observations. Like your writings, but in this and other stories it seems the action is lacking. In this particular story:

She took the end of the leather strap and rubbed it across the hard nipple. Then she flicked it back and down on the firmly positioned flesh.

Smack! Smack!

Michael could hardly believe the scene before him. Both women were in a high state of excitement and ready for anything. He decided to encourage Gwen and at the same time take control of her passion.

"Gwen my dear, I think you are being hampered by that tight fitting jacket you have on. Let me help you out of it."(end copy)

Just when it starts to gets hot, you start talking about taking off her jacket and continue in that vein. NOT saying to take it out, just the sex scene could have, needs more umph. Two lines of what has great potential, and then a lot of talk about. I understand you building excitement, but this story needed (imo) more on smacking her nipples, fondling her privates, but two smacks and move on? Maybe more on describing her feeling of embarrassment from being aroused, etc.

Please keep writing.