All Comments on 'The Sexual Awakening Ch. 01'

Enjoyed your work. Normally, I don't care for twin sibling encounters. Too often it leaves all other parties outside of their social circle. This was a good one.

Have you considered leaving some bush on one of your future characters?

Not all men are interested and turned on by a pre-pubescent appearance.

Good luck.

This was a really good story as the build up was much better than most stories. I also loved the thought processes of both characters here and how you went for the unusual route of the sister being the one that initiates the sexual relationship rather than the other way around which is more common. I also loved how Danii went from being jealous of another girl touching her brother to actually finding it a turn on.

Keep him up her

Thanks for your feedback it's much appreciated. I like that you picked up on Danni's hints of jealousy; it may feature more for part two. As for the seamen, I'd presume they are at sea... I don't know how they got into my story *Facepalm.

I have considered this and I may feature some bush - not a forest though! I am planning to bring a few more characters in for a bigger role so these twins aren't likely to remain exclusive.

Let the twins be exclusive.

Did Tom and Danni bother to pick up their clothing in the family before their parents got back from a very long dinner? I though they would be caught fucking on the on the couch. Honestly, you are in serious need of an editor. Your grammar is awful and you seem to misspell a great deal. You use strange works like "grinded" rather than the proper word "ground" and much more. You really need an editor.

Good luck in the future.

Thanks for your comment. Honestly it's a learning process as this is my first story. I believe my grammar wasn't too bad but obviously there will be a few discrepancies. Please note that I am not from the US however my characters are, meaning that I have written in US English for effect. Sit tight as I address the clothes issue in part two and I shall also look into using an editor this time now I have an established story.

.............and no one extra.

'nuff said.

I loved it! Reminds me of my first time with my brother... we didnt use condoms either... never have ;)

Really loved this. Great writing. =)

One of the best stories on this site. Very hot.

You gotta finish this.

Love reading your comments. I have been completely swamped by uni work but I am still writing when I can!

Is just great and refreshing. The authors that complain that I have not written a story for Lit. and therefore have no right to critique their work are simply immature children. Best of luck in the future.

BODY ONCE TOLD ME

One of the best.....I wish you would have written the follow up or other stories. Your writing style is excellent

Simply spellbinding! Twin sex at its loving best.....Can't wait for the next chapter!

I nearly cummed just reading it. Beautifuly written

A very hot story

please write part 2, Part one was amazing

More please. this is such a hot sexy story please continue so we know where this goes for them.

Very realistic, as if you have lived some of it. I also notice that you like to put your characters in jeopardy of being discovered. As someone who knows, a certain someone and myself tried to avoid that at all costs, tho sometimes it did happen. Mostly however, we managed to abstain until it was very very safe. Which had an unintended result, a screaming need for nobody but one another. Another similarity of thought. We were not cousins from "Back in the Holler" we weren't missing teeth, or dragging our knuckles. We we educated, tho not movie stars we were physically appealing judging by our social lives, children of an upper middle class family. We just had an incredibly strong attraction for one another that reached it's eventual conclusion. It continued off and on for 25+ years. Wouldn't have changed a thing.

Great story can we have part two please.

Thanks for your kind words. In truth I did have part 2 partially completed but I felt it lacked the realism of the first part so I felt it best to leave alone. Maybe one day I shall revisit it.