All Comments on 'The Succubus'

Outstanding plot, very well written, i love the ending!

Man!?!? UN-FREAKING-BELIEVABLE. Welcome to Literotica my friend.

Dmitry like

I'm sorry, but the start, those first five or ten words that spill into a sentence are just too important. Yours are too simple, and not 'catchy' enough. By that I mean that it's too simple. I'd suggest you take it down, re-write it and stop giving people a 'history' or 'origins' story to start the show with.....Make it part of a conversation, have the characters or 'a character' question the rigidity of the history that they know.... Just don't force people to wade through something as boring as: Well, this is where they came from, this is how they live and this is how they feed. Oh, and our hero/ine is one of them...... Okay? Get the picture??