All Comments on 'The Test Ch. 02'

by Sacanaz

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AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Nice story but a pity

they rushed in to the sucking and fucking on the first night - needed to be built up more and to build up the readers expectation too. One point you need to be aware of is to proof-read your own work or get someone to do it for you as you changed names from Bill to Ron - also some typo errors but overall a good read.

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