by CafeExtreme
Author should go back to grade school. Some serious flaws would be corrected such as "learnt" which should be "learned" aren't made by even 10 year olds.
Loved the story it was so hot! Wonderful job! And don't let the comment under mine bother you, as I've said numerous times this is a sex story not English 101.
Very erotic story. I loved your descriptions of the various acts. Best wishes.
And, for the owner of the negative comment below, a line line from The Oxford Concise Dictionary:
learn // v. (past and past part. learned /, / or esp. Brit. learnt //)
very sensual and fun read! the negative poster below must be that rare 1 in a million person who also gets Playboy just for proofreading. hehe
This is a very pleasurable read. Only a gross, creep would resort to grammar correction for an erotic story.