by woodmanone
GOOD JOB WOODMAN 1. A GOOD PORTRAYAL OF THE OLD WEST. P/S HAVE YOU BEEN TO TORTILLA FLATS AND GOLDFIELD AZ, TK U MLJ LV NV
Those new to Lit who heed your standard "no/little sex" disclaimers on one of your stories and pass over it are depriving themselves of a good read - sans sex as it may be - from a master story teller. This one being a prime example. Thanks for another superb story.
Lit ID: Tyro999
Ya done it agin pardner! Great story, well written. I enjoyed it a lot.
Another good read, can't say better than that. LOL
Did wonder how you got Justin and Justine mixed... A way to find out how quick he still was?.. Keep up good work.
Gini
The ending seemed a bit rushed, perhaps leading to a sequel of some sort. But overall, a very nice piece of fiction.
Another masterful story. I look forward to each of your new stories. It's hard to find anything new in the old west era, whether on tv, movies or in books. You provide an outlet that is missing. Keep up the great stories.
It certainly would do as a screen play for a new Western Film. I loved the twist of Etta going back to her first love.
In the film you could have her suffering conflict over the ease with which he kills outlaws and her feelings about owing her life to him...
Woodman. You just keep the hits rolling. This was another great story. Thanks for sharing it with us. Keep up the great work.
You have written another excellent tale. Please keep up the good work. I look forward to more of your best. Norm
Could nearly feel the dust and smell the sweaty horses
A pleasant change from the usual suburban midlife crises scenario that is favoured amongst authors.
Thank you for sharing the fruits of your talent
Once again you have done well. The story was somewhat to the formula, but with better than average character development and a real page turner.
Both ears and the tail.
A wonderful story. I really liked it from the first word, but didn't like the last one (THE END) was hoping for more. So now I'm waiting for the next woodmanone fantastic story.
I loved this story from the first word to the last string of asteriks; but I still feel the knife twisting in my gut from the ending. It sorta reminds me of that fella on the porch in "End of an Era", the difference being that the knife here was bigger, serrated, and right to the heart.
I truly enjoyed your story.keep up the great work.the ending was unexpected but still good.
AGAIN ANOTHER GOOD WELL WRITTEN AND EXCITING STORY! YOU ARE A VERY TALENTED WRITER AND SHOW A GREAT INTEREST IN EVERY DETAIL OF THE STORY.I WISH I WAS AS TALENTED AS YOU ARE AT WRITING STORIES .AND AS I SAID WHEN I COMMENTED ON REMINGTON 44 THAT YOU SHOULD CONSIDER PUTTING THESE STORIES INTO A BOOK BECAUSE THEY WOULD BE A GREAT SUCCESS .! THANKS AGAIN
gave it a 4. i really liked the story. but i am a sucker for the perfect ending and that meant tom and ette for me.
If you think about it the ending was not bad at all. Etta was not in love with him or she wouldn't have chosen the other man. Now he has a woman who has no baggage to drag her down. It's rather obvious at the end that he will court and marry his new woman. So for all the people who wanted him and Etta to get together I will point out that if they had married she would have forever been comparing him to her former fiance and wondering if she had made the right decision. No man deserves to have a wife who can't give 100% of herself to her husband and their marriage. Etta simply would never have been able to do that.
You sure do beat all. After I said your short stories were not as good as your long stories you turn right around and give me 2 shorts in a row to remind me that you are the master.
Ed Grocott
edgrocott@gmail.com
Excellent Western adventure! Enjoyed every word. Makes one want to go see the movie, any chance of a script? Mucho Gracias for it!
after some research could well be Fact or a reasonable facsimely for this was the Olde West and rules were bent, TK U MLJ LV NV
Dumb ass cunt walks away from the man who went on a near suicide mission to save her to go with the pussy who wouldn't even stand up to his dad. But for Tom she'd be a whore in Sonora. Good riddance to that bitch.
In my version...when Sanders comes into the picture and she wants to go with him, I'd have told her, "He coward when braced by his parents but I rode through hell for you and killed for you but you go back to him???? Fuck you and the horse you rode in on!
Get the fuck away from me... I never want to see your face again! Hope your life is miserable!"! Yeah, I know. Sounds pathetic but your ending is just too predictable.
I love westerns and this was an excellent one. It was well written and I only noticed a couple of typos (one apparently missing word and a Justine instead of Justin). I was surprised at the ending and how Etta chose, but free will sucks sometimes, but no one’s going to be happy is free will is denied.
On the technical side, I’ve done a lot of historical research on this area for my western stories on another site so I noticed several issues with the dates, timeline, and historical events. I’ll send a PM with that in case you’re interested.
I’m really looking forward to reading some of your other works.
Thot the story was excellent but was very disappointed with the ending. Not up to the caliber of the rest of the story
Boy, reading some of the comments had me laughing at their anger at Etta for ditching Tom. Life sometimes just sucks, but I think he got the better of the swap. Anyway, great story told in the Western tradition that many have enjoyed for ages. At least Tom didn't kiss his horse and ride off into the sun set like a lot of the movie cowboys did when I was growing up.
Tom lucked out. Eta was a loser from square one; she was such a good liar that everyone thought she was genuine.