All Comments on 'The Transplants'

Loved the story in story approach for this PG story.

I liked the idea of parallel stories, and both of them well done. The serial writing is a good idea, and sounds like it would be a lot of fun. Gather some friends and have a party every Saturday night, drink and eat a little, then read the next chapter of a serial story that one of the party goers wrote. Sounds like something to do to pass the long winter months in Ohio. Thanks for the good post and idea....Rich

I liked the premise and the "S" in "S" device. Other than obvious typos there were a few rough spots that I couldn't decide whether they were accidental or intentional. Either way they didn't significantly impact the story.

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<I><B>-- srgeek --</B></I>

I like the story, but the story in the story is much better than the story. The "family" issue added a small puzzle, but didn't enhance the story in any way.

I liked the "story within a story" concept. Both the actual characters and ones in the co-op story were well done

This one just didn’t work for me. Reading the “Story within the Story” pretty much ruined my interest in the original story, and the “within” story never caught my interest either.

In your Prologue you forgot one important item, i.e. incompetent managers whose only interest is to milk the company as much as possible - take Sears as an example.