All Comments on 'The Vault'

This story is hot in every sense of the word.

really enjoyed it thank you

This was a very good story.Sexual exploration is always more exciting to read about. Of course Im a romatic so the happy ending was a perfect fit.

I think that was one of the most original stories I've read here. Thank you.

And not just according to the thermometer. This site needs more stories like this - people who like each other, making each other happy. I'm coming back for more!

Well developed. Characters had a real form to them. Loved the ending line.

So original and believable. You have a great talent. This is one of the best I have read on this site. Congratulations!

Story line was original and could have evolved as both believed that it could have been the last days on earth. It was hard to believe both had been married to a couple of duds but the discriptions were well done and enjoyable. TY

I hope you continue the story, at least one more chapter.

Minor cavil - only the sprinkler heads over the fire open. Otherwise, great.

Never really lingered into the romantic section, but this story caught my eye. Indeed it was full of superb detail and flowed just right. It would seem that this could be a possible opener for a two part story. You got the action, so what about the outcome. very unique original and exotic. Loved the whole between dream and reality sex/wet dream. way to go 5 stars all the way and congratulations on an outstanding story. my friends

Yours truly,

-acer

Very good story. keep writing

I loved your story - the only problem now is I want a woman like her.

to a perfect story. Very good story line and well written. Very believable while hot and playful at the same time! Thank you for sharing!

A friend pointed out this story to me, and with the exception of the nearly page long paragraph on page 3, this was a pretty good story. The characters and situations were believable.

I'd definitely like to see a sequel or a continuance of this story, see the after-effects of their weekend in the vault.

I'll definitely be reading your other work.

Well done, and bravo.

Great characters and wonderful visualizations.

I look forward to more.

Other writers & Authors should read this for substance and how you got there.<P>

The paragraphs already mentioned should be no more than 3 to 4 sentences long. Much better flow can occur when they are shorter.<P>

Excellent work Author - you are looked forward to.<P>

With Very High Regard

Great writing and unique plot. However, this story makes me very sad. It reminds me of an event which happened in the past that was really Earth shattering . . .

What a story - erotic as all get out - romantic, sexy, and interesting. Realistic dialogue and likeable characters. I was rooting for them both after page 1. Well done!

This couple's story deserves a follow up! They are both inexperienced even while they are adventuresome = perfect combination for future story(ies) about their adventures with, for example, somewhat public sex or just plain loving in their new home.

Splendid fantasy with literate expression and a PUNch line at the end.

Without a doubt, story is in the top five on this site. Well Done. Keep writing

Great story. Did you start with the ending line?

very good story. thank u for sharing and keep writing more!

I admit, good writing and good charakter description, but there is just one thing. I don't like stories in the present tense. So I did edit it for myself into the past tense and now I'm happy with it.

Thanks

Frank

I admit, good writing and good charakter description, but there is just one thing. I don't like stories in the present tense. So I did edit it for myself into the past tense and now I'm happy with it.

Thanks

Frank

PS: I don't know why my original comment was posted as anonymous. I didn' want to do that.

I enjoyed this story very much I like the longer stories with actual story and plot character development all that and you do it very well. I like a lot of your stories and look forward to reading more.

The punch line was worth a Million...........

Great story

Mike..................

Beautiful.

Really liked the ending line.

Truly a solid story, well written, excellent characters, good plot and genuine development - fantastic job!

Jason

Really enjoyed it - Thanks!

Perfectly done.

Congratulations.

You win another "Favorite Author" Badge BB.

Excellent. A good plot with graphically describes sex that is quite plausible.

I really enjoyed this story. This was an interesting story line and I Love the discoveries made by the characters. Many thanks to CJ for the recommendation! ☺️

- pal