All Comments on 'The Voice Within'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Very interesting!

What this story needs to get the 100 is a better explanation of the voice within. The first half of this story is VERY well done, but once he has the implant speaking, the story seems too rushed. Flush out a little more detail of this voice and the resulting consequences and this story will be a very good one.

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