All Comments on 'The Waiting Game'

A male fantasy. Can 3 women not be jealous?

Can you have focus at work or home? It's much better than Playboy After Dark unless you're a Hefner.

Spectacular fantasy. The prolonged waiting in anticipation was perfect for the the unbelievable climaxes. Sexy gorgeous women all jealous free and bisexual lusting for each other and the one lucky guy with the sex/X boxes scattered around the apartment. Really! No air conditioner due to frequent blackouts? (External or internal?)

Best story I’ve read

Yes, the last couple pages were worth it!

Outstanding. Very well written. Great flow beginning to end.

This is one of the most amazing story I've read on this website. Kudos to the author for writing this masterpiece.

Think this needs more to see if the 4 of them all living tighter.

Why don't you do some crowdfunding and turn this into a movie???

Excellent! Lots of tension, masturbation, girl-on-girl. A very pleasurable read....

LOVED this, right from he and Sonya putting on a show in girl's team shower room at beginning to free-for-all at end-lovely characters and the way you describe them/their bodies, great dialogue, and hot sex.

Easy 5, and going to explore your faves.

Excellent.

Good job, thanks for sharing your work! I loved the story but Mike was a dipshit.

I liked the story very much. Only thing I'd change is to give Claire a better longer fucking from Michael. I think Claire was a bit short changed. Michael had cum fucking Sonya and Tami. He needed to cum while fucking each woman so it was Claire's turn. Then have Sonya eat Michael's cum out of Claire while Tami cleans Claire's juices off Michael's cock. It would add one more paragraph to a great story.

Fabulous. Awesome in a single word. Every Man's Dream Life🔥

Superb story and situation, and four very likeable characters.

I past my prime so long ago that this is just sad to read, I just would like that a 10% of this had happened to me. Sad indeed

Good story, a lot of men’s dreams, put a big smile on my face

Very, very nice...very erotic...I knew Sonya was gonna forgive him, but it was still nerve-wracking, waiting for the moment to happen...that is why I love reading this story!!

Five**5**Stars. 🌠🌠🌠🌠🌠💥💥💥💥💥

Very sexy, erotic, and well written. Loved the build up to the hot climatic (lol) ending. Enjoyed the story and characters, especially Claire’s surprising development. 5

At the 3 way blow job I blacked out! Lol

Next chapter, they each marry their partners, they move into a duplex and the girls all want babies.

That was a great read.

Such a fun, sexy story. Even though the situation itself is a ridiculous fantasy, the characters really seem alive and it was really easy to like each one of them, making a really great suspension of disbelief.

I love the way heat and sex permeate every inch of this story! You are also really good at capturing the yearning, the power of dreams and fantasies - and the joy of bringing them to life. Thank you!

Quality writing all the way, great premise, great characters,, great sex!

I absolutely love this story. This story is literally the reasons why I started writing. Just have not got my own account so I can start sharing my experiences with others.

Yummy!

Worth the wait

Well done!

It still rates every wet, dripping, panting superlative in Webster's big Dict !

Thanks for writing this story! It was well written and enjoyable!

Thanks for sharing such a hot story. I like the premise, got drawn into the lives of the characters, and was happy with the climax (pun intended) and conclusion. Great work! ;)

Great story telling! I can see more possibilities to it by the 4 of them fulfilling exhibitionist fantasies together!

I liked that the managed to stay true to each other and reaped the rewards. The build up was great. I could feel his frustration and anticipation. I also liked that everyone involved ended up happy. I can see a fun part 2 if you decide you want to write it. Great job. Thanks.

This pretty much has it all. Great character development, extremely naughty situations, just enough emotional turmoil to raise the stakes. i especially like the vicarious/voyeuristic element with the Long Distance girlfriend. Great stuff, totally worth a read (or two).

Unbelievable finish

5 stars

This is a wonderful story that is well-written, realistic and taking. I think I can say that this is the most beautiful (and yet so excited) story that I have read on Literotica.

The characters all have a specific personality (not like some overused, standard, low quality porn story personality) that could have easily been someone real.

It was especially nice that the main character stayed strong and did not cheat.

Great work!

the story express in a nature way but it let me thinking if the sexual evil out of contro no one cant imagine how it will performance！the author make a vivid describe on this two moth the waiting game was so fantastic and attractive. it let the reader can not stop to thinking and to trying. as an erotic essay this is very excellent. this aslo like a drama when i am reading it i think about it. hope this drama will be showed on the screen as a fucking wonderful porn video！！！

What a remarkable story. The respect they have for each other never weakens. Nicely done.

Perfection. I didn't think it was possible.

I wanted to read something sexy and plausible, this delivered above and beyond my hopes!

Very well written and the build up of each person was excellent. From backgrounds to their inner desires to realising each of their fantasy. You gotta write part 2 of this story ! Well deserved 5 stars.

The characters and situations are so real and plausible, I could imagine 90% of this actually happened exactly like this. In fact, I'm sure that someone, somewhere had this scenario happen at least once (though maybe with slightly less gorgeous women). And then it ends with the least-impossible version of the ultimate male fantasy. I'm going to bookmark this and read it any time life has got me seriously down. 5 Stars, easily.

I want to be someone's roommate in that story. I felt like I was Claire, and oh gawd yes! What a great story!

This story was great!! It kept me on edge reading until page 6.. Thank you!!

That was super hot. Kept me rock hard the whole time, and I came like a champ at the end. This was my ultimate fantasy.

The fact that he didn't cheat on Sonya and then the way it unfolded made this a gem in the coalfield because I hate cheating and casual stuff and group sex category is mostly about them. So this one is special.

Maybe the best I've read on this site.

WOW! what a story! well written with a wonderfully playful tone, fun characters, and imaginative, HOT action. to top it off, i think it's the first sexy story that's ever made me laugh- love it.

The characters were developed with a tease all the way through. The story is captivating as the emotions and thoughts flow with ease. Some parts are just a riot and deliciously funny. If there were any grammatical errors I didn't see any. Extremely well written and edited. For a short 6 page story on this site I would rate this as number 1. I don't think anyone could write a better story or execute as well. My chair is quite wet so I better take care of a serious matter. Thanks so much for a wonderful read.

my favorite story ever, esspecially after sonya arrived

Excellently written and postively erotic!

A good story. Good plot, good characters, hot scenes. Thanks

Fantastic story, and I mean Story, with a plot that developed and real characters that, while I didn't grow to care about them, at least they weren't just interchangeable tits & ass.

I have to laugh at the fact that the only thing the nit-pickers find wrong is that your PoV gets swapped a few times. Well done!

J

Strong plot, a decent amount of character development and lots of hot scenes.

One jarring thing that I did notice on the final page though was that Michael describes Sonya, his girlfriend, as "the lovely blonde" in "... pulling the lovely blonde's crotch towards her face".

I sounds very odd for him to describe his girlfriend in such a way and makes it sound as if Michael is no longer narrating the story.

But saw several errors of "I vs me". It is a common mistake to use subjective "I" when objective "me" is appropriate.

You are a master wordsmith and story teller!

Please and many thanks?

I kept waiting for him to be kicked out as his GF joined the other two

I loved this

Love this one!

Hot sex, great anticipation, wonderful dialog.

Made me cum along with them!

...that is all.

It can be hard to find a good group sex with a shot ton of bi girls such as myself. Hehehe if you ever need one I'm a person 😉

are not enough!

and three men. Seems like it would have to get kind of gay (shudder). Girl on girl, OK. Guy on guy? Not so much.

Oh, gosh. I think I'm gonna cum again...

Incredibly sensual and sublimely temptuous and tantalizing tale! Definitely up to your usual high standard.

Creative, sexy, and HOTT! Thank you.

Just wonderful what a great story

I really liked your story. Part two please!

That was fantastic. Well written and every man's dream come true.

bill...

Oh my gosh. I needed a good story. It was long but so well worth it. I am dripping wet and would love to be a part of this story as any of the ladies.

Incredible. My girl friend came time after time. Her roommate came home and I pulled her into a threesome. She only complained a little bit when I slowly entered her anus as she laid on her roommate, sucking her clit. This story makes us climax several times whenever any of us read it aloud....

Your story is mindblowingly like one of my fulfilled fantasies. My wife and two beautiful women spent a glorious afternoon much like your coming together. I wish it would happen again and again, but those are one in a life time happenings. Why can't we all get together like that, all the time?

i don't normally post but his is one of the best stories i have read and a second part would be awesome ..... thank you for sharing

very hot, fucked my girlfriend all the while wishing we could join this group for some hot fun

I am going to fuck and refuck by wife tonight all the while wishing that Sonya, Mike, Clair, and Tami were all here in bed with us. What fun that would be.

I've never cum that many times reading one story. I couldn't keep my hands off myself!

I really liked it; as a girl, I love to know how guys think. I love stories from the male point of view. It was amazing! Keep it up

Great stuff. I usually prefer the first person stories from the girl's POV, but this was outstanding.

Especially the pace, just right to reach the edge, then hold off. By the end I though my balls were going to explode and they did. Going to check out some more of your stories when I recover.

Just wanted to say thanks for all the wonderful and encouraging comments people have left in the past year. I appreciate all the multiple exclamation points you've taken the time to type. To anyone who posted anonymously, please shoot me an email so I'll be able to thank you personally.

-Ken

k.pierceerotica@yahoo.com

That was by far and a field, one of the best I have ever read. Goddamn so well written. Great characters, I actually felt poor mikey's weeks of tension building up. Fuck, it was excruciating, very well written indeed. FUCK.

I loved the story. You hit my fantasy trifecta of a gal who could kick my ass, an Asian chick, and redhead, all interested in doing me AND each other! Delightful!!

I'm not sure about the Skype-sex, but I never got into it. Possibly b/c I'm too cheap to get a decent webcam, so the resolution never was worth it to me!

Still, s/t I and the wife definitely need to try. Talking to each other does it for us b/c we're old farts that grew up with phone sex, not that we mind visual aids...but never mind the IRL stuff.

You wrote a splendid fantasy sir!

Great story line. Hot action with great descriptions.

I really enjoy the way you write, and I especially like your dialogue. It feels human. And the bodies you put together feel heavenly...or they would. They sure LOOK heavenly the way I imagine them. Anyway, I enjoyed the hell out of this story and I look forward to whatever else you have in store.

Thoroughly Interested - Galloglaich

Fun story, almost believable and I'm SOOOOOOO jealous!

Fantastic and wonderful fantasy story. Wish it was about me.

One of the best stories I've read on here, and one of the best erotica I've read ever. Engrossed through the whole thing <3 amazingly written and addictive to read with really likeable (and sexy) characters

Best story I have ever read! You should do a part 2!!!

Brilliant

What a great story. At times I laughed and giggled but I had a wicked smile the whole time. Thank you.

One of the best

Ahahaha great line, and great story :D

Wow... That was extremely hot, and I loved every sentence of it!!!

A big turn on, oddly my favorite line was when Sonya disappeared into the bedroom and closed the door.

This story is the single best short story I've ever read, at least for my particular taste. 10 stars, 20 stars.

I particularly love that the dude wasn't a total asshole and that none of the characters were unrealistically fantasy-like in personality. For example, his girlfriend *was* pissed off that he kissed another girl, and the sexy lesbian roommate neighbour coworkers were scared off by the sudden sex in front of them. Things flowed at just the perfect pace to feel plausibly plausible and yet male-fantasy ideal.

No complaints about writing, grammar, voicing, dialogue, etc. Sure it could be deeper, but only if you took this fairly-tight package and made it into a novel.

Love your stories!