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northlanderalmost 13 years agoDecide on a Tense and keep it there
Not a bad story but it is spoilt by the changing tenses "he said" "you said"
He did, you did. makes the story confusing. Try finding an editor who will help your stories, it is hard to criticize when you are the writer
JedMcGaryalmost 13 years agoDescription?
It might help to describe what the two lovers look like. Also, a little background info on Will and Rose would be much appreciated. Where did they meet? Where did Will go for school? Are they neighbors?
sendhowardabout 11 years agoPretty Good
I really enjoyed this. Write some more and watch out for switching narrators!
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