All Comments on 'The Wedding Dress'

I liked your fantasy story. It really is highly improbable, but you smoothed over the beginning making it plausible. From that point it really flowed nicely up to the very end. I wish you spent as much time working at your ending. This is why I only rated it 75%.

It was not clear what was happenning. There should have been more dialog if you expect us to believe they could connect long term.

Also, the family bit was very weak. You really could have shined with their interplay between the new couple. Thanks again and continue your good work. Ttom

I liked the story. It's cute, and it's sweet. My one complaint would be that your Veronica character is a bit uneven. She goes from being something of a helpless waif, to being an in-charge person, to being somewhat brazen. On the other hand, I'm not sure how you could have written the story differently in order to accomplish the objective of the story line. Regardless, I really DO like the story.

-- KK in Texas

it's amazing what women will put up with until we finally get pushed over the edge.

Cute. Ending just the way us romantics love it.

George certainly felt much older as a character, kind of jaded and pompous at first, but he kinda grew on me. He was nicely juxtaposed to the bride's "innocense" and buttony-cuteness.

I hope to read more from you.

Great story. Loved the twist. Got worried it was going to turn into some weird fetish story.

Loved your story...especially loved that he "saved" her from marrying a jerk. George was a wonderful first lover for Veronica. The end, with her family at the door was perfect.

Are you getting better with each story? I think so! Keep up the good work, this was a fun read.

Wow...that was an amazing story. I was turned on from the moment Veronica entered George's room. It was well written with good description; I could feel Veronica's nervousness and hesitation, and later her anger, and the same from George. Good work.

If all wedding nights were that hot...

Well done!

Maharat

I would have liked to have seen the family catch her with George, but beyond that, it was a very hot story.

I should be so l(f)ucky!

Nice Tarakin Very Nice...

a couple of minor things but sweet, lovely, believable

I really enjoyed that!

Thanks!

And great dialogue as well... Sexy and tender.

Nothing like good pussy-eating to make a story for me. And I do love your last line. Well done!

...very sweet.

Really nice little story

i'd love it 10/10

I like it. :) Made me smile. :)

I'm a sucker for more than just dirty sex yanno. :p~

you started a really good story. Consider continuing it as a romance between these two.

that was awesome

great story

loved that he got the cherry.

asweetdick

Loved a sweet story of spontaneous love and affection.

The bridegroom deserved it.

The best man. Well?

I really enjoyed this story. As A hopeless romantic, I give it two thumbs up.

What a whore.

Nothing like bride being fucked on her wedding day by some other than the groom.