All Comments on 'The Wedding Party'

Not bad... But too short, missing the atmosphere!

It's a good idea for a story, but it's just too "Wham Bam...Thank You Ma'am'." Needs some character building and build up. You have good writing skills and should put them to use.

I agree. Well written, but too short.

Thanks for the advice about the length!

As this is a play by play account of a true event, the shortness of it is intentional as it was a short encounter. But I will take note of adding some length to it for my writers portfolio!

Thank you for the feedback!