All Comments on 'There is No Substitute for David'

You really should get an editor. You have a good start of a story but it has a lot of little errors like an extra letter on a word, probably a typo. But there are also alot of larger mistakes. I really think it would improve your work to have an editor help you correct that as well as help you develop the story a bit more. I felt like there was so much build up to this sex he wa wanting all week and then you didn't actually have us there for more than a blow job. You didn't let us enjoy them finally having sex. It left the story feeling like the climax was missing (pun intended).