by HungLikeAMonkey
The monkey could probably write better than this. Try again and make it realistic. "Tongues slapping together." Not sure how that's possible.
Tongues can slap when people viciously kiss- it's makes a wet slapping sound. Done in the heat of passion- but I take on board your point, thank you.
You came across as a deeply unpleasant, insecure person.
You can't write either,