All Comments on 'Time Dancer Ch. 02'

Loved it

The sex was very erotic and the writing first rate.

Good job.

have certainly done it great justice with this story. And to think I found it by looking for titles starting with 'time'; for some reason the search engine will not work on this iPad.

On practical note, pay a bit more attention to grammar, particularly tenses; one sentence in the first chapter changed from present to past tense, within a half dozen words.

Another suggestion would be to find a tutorial on dialogue structure.

As a long time non-fiction writer and inveterate editor, I can 'read through' the grammatical errors, but the average reader will struggle and get distracted from your creativity and your creativity is very strong; combining that innate talent with the nuts & bolts of writing, which is learnable, will make you a very powerful writer. Very.

I'm definitely adding you to my 'authors to read' list.