All Comments on 'Total Submission'

You started with an erotic idea… something that excited you, and you wanted to share with others. But I think it developed too fast. Spend more time on descriptions and feelings. Especially feelings! What is it that makes this so arousing for Jessie?

If you want to be a great erotic writer get your mind in your cunt. The mind is the sexiest part of the body. Keep weaving a sexy tale of submission.

I really enjoyed reading and cumming to your story.

Keep writing.

Steve

With the lady in charge and as eager as she was, would have been another way to go, roofie not required.