by haremgirl
I continue to enjoy your wonderful story. It is a good mix of adventure and romance.
Boyd
i so love this story...can't wait to read on. its pure torture to wait till each night but at least they are releasing a chapter a night. Thank you for such a awesome work of art. respectfully fan in Texas naynay and Merry Christmas
Find it hard to believe the story at times.
* Some plot twist are rather old and worn, it becomes predictable.
* Lacking reality / knowledge /research in some areas. Campfires, for example, need to be babied. You can't leave it for half an hour and expect it to simmer nicely.
* Few men are *that* caught up with sex. Maybe as teenagers but not when 26.
You only avoid spotting the holes when intensely immersed in the story, and if not, people might not bother to leave a comment about it.
Juat trying to be constructive, its a great story in many other ways.
it's NAVEL, not naval. Learn to spell your body's parts.
AND try to? No, It’s TO try to
rogue band of Indians roaming around? This is THEIR land, YOU'RE the rogue.