All Comments on 'Train Ride'

My review title says it all.

The pacing was great... and I loved the way you described him following her... Her glancing over her shoulder at him...

VERY WELL WRITTEN INDEED!

Absolutely one of the best I've had the pleasure of reading. Extremely well written, your descriptions were so compelling that I could fantasize that I was Ian walking along the street behind you and peeking up your skirt on the train. Wonderful, slow, erotic tease leading up to a really hot finish. Please write more V&E stories - you have a knack for it.

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Extremely well done! As with all of your stories, well paced, build up of sexual tension and vivid descriptions that put the reader right in the action. Well done!

A few typos but the story is terrific. Personally the type I like best. One I'd like to see myself in where many are just so outrageous as to not be believable. I mean there's only so much "tight butts", "36C boobs", let's see what else--o yes, "tanned body" that I can stomach. Well you get the drift. AND thank you in the future for not using "bro". You have some imagination. Thank you.

What a turnon, always makes it better when there is a risk of getting caught. You are a very good writer.

What a lucky bastard!! i wanna be him!!

When I was 18 or 19, I was seduced by another college student I met on the overnight train from Portland to Oakland. We didn't get naked and it wasn't as good as your story but she did give me a blow job in our seats while I held one of her large breasts with one hand and rubbed her pussy with the other. There was a woman across the aisle from us who appeared to be sleeping. Thanks for reminding me of this.

Brilliant story.. keep the good work up ...

Nikki, for many years I have been reading your work. Always well paced, not to slow, not to fast and best of all possible. I had a similar experience in real with my girlfriend. This brought back very pleasant memories. You write beautifully.

You are my favorite author. Please keep it up.

Regards Sydney

amazing! Please continue!

haha but seriously you are the best author i have read in a long long time! xx

So fuckin erotic, it really set me thinkin how much excitement this scenario would give me. I'll keep looking at guys and other chicks on the bus and train and think of this story. Thanks Nikki.

WOW Nikki

Great story erotic, sensual fun

Keep writing

Hope you continue this story. I'm up for a train ride now! White can I find a woman like Jane?

i often ride the train myself, im ALWAYS looking at girls and lady's wishing this would happen to me, i have even rub myself against a cpl ladys while being pack with commuters, 1 lady was bent over at the waist attending to her lil girl in the pram mmmmmmm

I like the time you put into detailing this trip into pleasure. The scene, description and conclusion was exactly like my kind of fantasy. I hope you keep on writing.

wonderfully written, i enjoyed every bit of it... thank you

I have fantasized of joining the metre high club forever!

A gripping read that I couldn't be put down until finished. One of the best erotic stories I've read on Literotica.

Great read and loved the story line.

blonde haired (blonde-haired)

ontot he train (onto the)

slip on (slip-on)

turn on (turn-on)

through is boxers (his)

close up (close-up)

very thing, very short (thin)

up and own (down)

Jane (-had) originally had filled

other-wise (otherwise)

join (joint )

work of (-the mechanism) (it)

Whew! I could hardly contain myself (probably your idea) reading your story. The pace was perfect, the heat gradually built up and you captured the feelings of both characters through the entire train ride. You really rose to new heights of prose and surely drew on some experience as it was as real as it could get. You should be writing all the time and use your amazing techniques in a wide array of scenarios. Your work must be read by others who could learn so much. You set high standards for other writers, but some will never be able to attain your quality. Just Rockin' mayflower dot pilgrim at the gee mail site.

Pity these are only fantasies but they are beautiful things to dream about.

wow....Nikki you are such a talent

This one ! This one right here !

Loved it .

Thank you .

I'd forgotten about this story but I had read it a couple of times previously, alright there maybe one or two typo's but a well written story particularly with a tight scenario and characters is always a joy to return to.

All the good stories have disappeared, and now they are either too vulgar and fast or never reach climax. For example, on asstr, in the 90's there was a good story of train ride of a girl in europe in a crowded train. The guy scissored her panties under a short skirt, snip and it snapped and he picked up. From there it goes on to reluct but still decent treatment, no vulgarity, minimal vulgarity is what people like.

All the good stories have disappeared, and now they are either too vulgar and fast or never reach climax. For example, on asstr, in the 90's there was a good story of train ride of a girl in europe in a crowded train to meet uncles. The young boy scissored her panties under a short skirt, two cuts only, middle and side. snip and it snapped and he picked up. From there it goes on to reluct but still decent treatment, no vulgarity, minimal vulgarity is what people like.

Mmmm if only I could get away with this……hehee good story as usual Nikki Darlin

Freaking hot Nikki. You’re the best. I’m so hard right now - Thank you!

Mmmmmmmm