All Comments on 'Trapped in Paradise'

goood story every one to fuck her mother like bush

It's an almost perfect story. Write part 2, where mom gets pregnant!

You had me right until ths sucking if the shithole finger. Then I felt nausious. Don't get me wrong, the finger is fun and anal is great. But the tasting is just gross.

it was a very, very good story, up until the word shithole, and i had to laugh, i mean, its just a funny word, anyways keep up the good work

I would have liked to seen more dialogue, specifically during the sex scenes, but overall enjoyed the premise.

It just wasnt that good. Sure, the preceeding few pages might have (potentially) been good, but the first was terrible.

Your editor sucks!... I think he spent too much time jerking off to the story, and not enough time adding missing words so that most of the sentences actually make sense!

I love this story; but the last few paragraphs were rushed and anal conflicted. Why should mom wash up and relieve herself and Ted continue to lay in bed with a poop dick. Now since you had no warning at the beginning about a perfect world where there is never any disease then I conclude that sticking the finger deep up someone's A-hole, than sucking on that finger is truly a soon to be case of hepatitis to be!!!??!!

It would be nice to see the mother and son go to a great female lawyer and ask for 51% of the family business, the house and cars (no payments), and Ted's college tuition and all additional cost paid for by the husband/father, and three year alimony; all applied for and at least temporarily granted with accounts controlled and managed by the wife/mother with junction approved by the family court and restraining order of 300 hundred yards and access to house under wife's approval and sheriff's supervision. All this done in the husband's little absence with his girlfriend and awaiting his return.

It also would be outstanding if Ted would confess his dying love for his mother, ask her to be his lifelong Soul mate, and get her pregnant since it is revealed that there is only a 17 year difference in ages.

Also take your time and don't rush it, no matter what anyone says; good story!!!

Who ever edited this story ,must have had his/ hers head up there ass. Other then that. Nice story thanks

I feel like you had an AI edit this for you.

Also, get a thesaurus. There is more than 2 ways to say vagina.

Very boring.