All Comments on 'Trespassing Can Be Dangerous Ch. 01'

Nice start. A little confusing at the beginning: one minute she was in the car admiring her legs, and the next she was outside for some reason - walking through the rain? Why?? But it got better - the dialogue and sex is well-paced, and you've set up the next chapter nicely. Looking forward to more!

Good srart. More please...

I'm guessing your testing the water with this short story. Please make the next chapter longer. The style is perfect. Keep writing! Gary

Keep writing. I think we'd all like to more of your...works.

Good going-I especially liked her (your?) outfit! I look forward to the next installment.

Definately going to read the next part

I love it. Such a quick, exciting read. Some may like longer, but 1pagers are great too so keep it up. Love your writing. This was really hot.