All Comments on 'Trouble'

The story was a little different and for the first time in the past few weeks, I realized that I haden't read it before. I am not saying that it is original, I am saying that most stuff on Lit are rewrites of often told tales.

Comments? Like a bad movie, much of this lengthy piece should have been cut out. So much of the verbage doesn't move the story along, whole paragraphs could have been eliminated.

My opinion is that the author's intent was to write an even longer piece, perhaps even a short novel, and what I read was a draft of that effort. The intention may be that on subsequent rewrites the odd scenes will be expanded, and the plot developed. And if that's the plan, go for it.

One of the most totally wanton stories I've read. And I mean that in a good way!

I really enjoyed the story and liked the idea behind her working her debt off.

It's pure puke. First the heavies( as she loves to call them) threaten her and then bet her friend within an inch of her life and the cops can't do a fuckin thing...puke...I don't read where she ever called them. You only use them to get your story done where the woman has to fuck for money. Can't you just write a story where the woman says " I think I'll fuck for money and does it) OH NO you gotta insult us readers with your puke...Puke Puke...Eat shit and die dumb ass writer( would be writer i mean). marriedwithballs#yahoo,com

the story was good but can be more good