by Cphucker
I really liked this story but could you also upload some of your older stories as well. As much as I love the new ones I still miss the classics.
Well written and maintains suspension of disbelief. The story is both unique and full of potential. Love the mix of incest and scifi. I'm filled with anticipation for their experiments. Glad you let the realism come through, tends to draw the reader in.
Thanks and please continue.
I'd like to read more about these twins and how they'll cope with all this.
4+ and that's because of the way you ended it, I was just getting into the story then wham it ended,now I have to wait and see what happens.
However it's a great story and I have enjoyed reading thus far, very interesting topic as it's been proven that twins do feel what is happening to the other such as being hurt or in pain.
An interesting and certainly arousing concept. And Devin acquiring his sister's physic ability would be a logical next step. Maybe even having their physic abilities expand to include other family members - and perhaps other friends too. Please do continue!
I'm in total agreement with you about Rebecca Linares. The boob job was a horrible idea.
I don't normally bother with any stories with paranormal elements but gave this a go simply because I have enjoyed the authors other stories. I have to say it was very good and I am looking forward to further chapters.
I wasnt able to finish the story when I first started it, but I had to search it out later to finish it. I rarely bother with that, but it captured my attention
Good job!
A very interesting concept so far.
I find the last half page a bit superficial, and a bit troubling that he seems to be "taking over" the narrative to some degree.
Try to keep it sister focused -
I am waiting to see how this plays out, it's very good so far.
GL
Hot idea for interaction between twins. Probably should be in Mind Control. Looking forward to the next chapter!
between 2-didn't like it and 3-liked keep writing,can't make my mind up with this one,
either its to so strange and stupid,don't know if next chapter is worth reading or its so strange and stupid I need next chapter ASAP
probably the second option have to know how things turn out
RE: netgenf - Thanks for your demand.
RE: brosismom - Come on, a 2 for a story you admit has you hooked? That's kinda slimy.
While at first the story concept seemed like a bit of a silly idea, the possibilities to build on once it starts are pretty hot. I imagine the twins sharing this gift and experimenting to drive each other to new heights of ecstasy, and possibly wanting to see how it would feel if they "shared" Emma, for example. I am looking forward to continued chapters.
Unique twist with a lot of possibilities to develop an interesting plot and supporting characters! Please write carefully to avoid letting it become superficial, cheap, or predictable. Please keep writing!!
I was so sad when it ended this idea is so intriguing its kinda genius!! Wow I mean I loved the characters, the concept, the writing it was superb. Its early in the morning as I'm writing this but I just had to show my support you are a brilliant writer. Twins being my favorite thing definitely didn't hurt either! Just wow! I was hanging on the edge of my seat hoping they might share a kiss or a cuddle. I kinda hope this stays between them without adding other sexual partners to the mix. What they share is so intimate I can't imagine someone else really understanding, but that's all up to the brilliant writer! I really can't wait to read more! I'm just thrilled at the thought!
with the other comments that you need to write the next parts soon, please ...
Great build up and there is so much you could do with the story line. I hope you continue with this series.
It ended so suddenly I am still sitting here in shock. There has got to be a continuation of this story. Keep up the Good Work.
P.S. I love your other stories as well.
An author pleads with his readers for feedback on whether or not he should continue the story (and implicitly threatens not to do so if feedback is insufficient), yet ignores any implorations to continue the work. Either write it or don't, it's a cruel trick to require those that enjoyed it to provide enough feedback to overwhelm those that didn't. Clearly people enjoyed the story, and now you've left them hanging. It's your right as an author to produce and post when and how you please, but you should produce good work because you know your work is good, not because you got enough "permission" from your audience. Write it or don't; people are waiting, whether you care about your positive feedback or not. Whether or not you decide to reward their interest before it wanes is your decision.
I never "pleaded" with anyone, so that's a little dramatic. I actually have the second part started but, as a human being, my life is subject to various distractions and fourth dimensional black holes that suck my time, preventing me from producing quality works of erotic fiction on any sort of deadline. Pardon me for not giving this unpaid hobby the highest priority in your life.
Yes, this is indeed an interesting twist of the mind. I like it! I loved your comment about not being quick enough with chapter 2. It seems they either come from anonymous or people that have never posted a story. It isn't as easy as it seems to be to whip up a story but I would love to see another chapter or two myself. Of course, when you find the time. tick tock...
I do like how you weave a story. Not going to rush you, lol, but definitely am waiting for whatever you have in mind to continue Devin and Alexa's experiment. Thank You
Interest concept. Please try to write the next chapter. I would love to know how this continues.
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The concept is interesting and challenging at once. As an excuse why siblings would have sex it's more original than most, but also poses some pitfalls that have to be avoided carefully. For example, what would happen if they did Emma at the same time? And how would Devin like it to get something stuck up Alexa's and therefore his own arse (where this appears to be heading)?
As for not having enough time, social security and leeching off friends and family are nothing to be ashamed of, so you have no excuse there. ;)
This story is going to be hard to wait for, as are most of your stories. You make the fingers fly turning pages and make a person very disappointed when the story is over. I am very happy to hear you have started writing the next chapter. Thanks for the stimulating stories.
As I'm reading I keep wondering why no one has ever written a story like this one before. It raises a number of questions. For example: If Devin keeps having dreams where Emma and Alexa are getting off together, would that begin to effect Alexa's interpretation of their friendship? Especially since she'll feel herself (himself?) getting off on the act? Would it be possible for Devin to use this as a means to control his sister?
Really looking forward to a sequel here. Hopefully there is still some fuel for the muse here.
Very original and erotic. I certainly would like to see where you take this amazing story.
I come back monthly now for almost 2 years hoping to see chapter 2... was one of the best concepts for a bro/sis story ive seen.. please if you write anything, write the next chapter of this...
This is amazing. Really fleshed out and an original and engaging plot. Please please continue, this makes me so hard
... because I don't see a Part 3.
That's disappointing, because it seems to me that it was really just getting started!
I really hope you have (much)more of this in the works, because I thought it was more than good enough, and quite unique.
I gave it 5 Stars.
I love the mix of siblings just being siblings, sexual intent, slight mystery, incest and the sexual torture/pleasure Alexa got from it. I wish there was another part to it, like testing if she can feel fucking herself
and a great slow sensuous build up to a possibly very erotic event. Please keep going.
that you are well. The scores for this story seem to have been hot enough to warrant a second chapter, so, since it hasn't appeared, I'm left wondering.
Assuming you are alive, I wonder if you moved to another platform/site. Or perhaps you've gone commercial.
In any event, I find your writing good and the storytelling engaging. Wherever you go, I hope you will find outlet for your writing talent.
A story about that is not about the sex. This is a really great concept very novel and the fact that they are twins makes it very erotic as well. I know it’s a long done piece but I think you would do a great job finishing it up
So now when you are back please complete this series. Don't leave this hanging again. I know you can pull up somthing good from here so please don't give up👍
I really hope you can come back to this. It’s clever and lighthearted, and the transition into incest is more organic than in many of these stories. Plus, there is so much you could expand on. I could see this becoming a novel.
Very hot, another story in this universe would be greatly apperciated by the fans!!
I partly agree with the angry comment above.
Certainly we can all understand the need for time to write, I the first, since personally I am writing drafts for a rather complicated non-herotic story due to the universe in which it takes place.
On the other hand, each of your stories that I have read ends abruptly, to the point where, I at least, have chosen to bookmark it without putting a vote, because you honestly seem to constantly leave us wanting more.
I guess this is unintentional, and if so, I'm sincerely sorry to sound that way, but I at least feel like you have to know how your readers feel.
All the stories that I have read written by you are fantastic, but I always end up feeling like you leave me on the edge and then walk away, to put a sexual metaphor, and while denial is fun for a while, it can end up irritating the other person if it lasts too long.
You have a great writing talent, really, and we all love your stories from what I can read in the comments, so please give us a sign that you are still there.
What do you mean *To be continued...if the voting is good!*. Can't you take constructive criticism. If you can't then don't write anything.
I thought the story was very interesting and that it was getting better as it when along.
An interesting, unique plot twist that has me intrigued. I’m writing my comment a year after the story’s post date—05-05-2022, to be exact—and so far don’t see any sequels, so I hope the story wasn’t discontinued, because I’d like to see what Alexa and Devin discover about themselves in their further experimentations.
OOPS! My bad.
In my previous comment I said I read this story “a year” after it was posted (05-05-2022). I mistakenly was looking at the posting date of the story above it in the list. I just discovered this story was posted in 2014, and I’m writing this in 2022, so not only do I not see any sequel, I don’t see ANY more stories by you, which is too bad. It would have been nice to see where this story went, and it would have been nice to read more works by you.
Eight years is plenty long enough to leave us hanging. I'm sure we all would agree it is time for at least an Epilogue, don't you agree?
Please be so kind s to allow us more of this story you wrote so well?
Would love a sequel! And I agree 100% that Rebecca Linares ruined herself with that horrible, unnecessary boob job. Same with Gina Paloma.
Just rereading this..I forgot how hot it was! Wish you would consider finishing it, or adding to it. But damn it's hot. Even though they didn't have sex!
Interesting idea and a good story.... Would love to hear more of how the twins progress this and any more possible changes that happen to the ability....
Many thanks for haring with us.
You definitely need to continue this story! ALL KINDS OF GREAT POSSIBILITIES! Fucking hot stuff!
More please
This could lead to a long term series. He dates Emma. They go to college and share an apartment. She could help him meet and hook up with a number of girls.
I wasn’t sure I was going to like this story, but another part might not be bad at all! It was kinda hot and quite a few places
That's one of the hottest stories I've read. How creative! I would definitely be interested in a series.