All Comments on 'Two's a Crowd Ch. 01'

One of the real problems for a reader on Literotica is getting into a good story, reading several episodes, only to have the author abandon it. I hope you will finish your earlier story(s).

I don't why the previous commentor says that the author didn't finish The Youth Trap. The husband determined the wife's infidelity, decided to cut his losses and hit the road. Anyway, I applaud the author's fortitude. She knows the usual gang will crucify her, yet she allows comments. She must really be a masochist! Oh, well, let the chips fall where they may.

Boyd

It is obvious that this husband has an inferiority problem. He does not act like the average male human being. Infidelity is one thing and he may decide to let a one time thing go. (He would still be a wimp for doing so.) But to have seen what was obviously an on going affair, with elements of an intimacy she never shared with him. Coupled with a lying campaign to make it seem like he is imagining it? Sorry this guy is an idiot. The slut won't even tell the truth when he tells her he saw what you the author described. One denial and the average husband would be out the door never to return. But this fool is still contemplating staying with this slut. Move to New York and leave her behind. When she finds you serve her with the papers and tell her to get lost. Make it hard to be found. No violence, and no confrontation. No angry words just silence. After all, she only lies to you anyway. So why did I give you a score of 100? Because there are sad stupid individuals like this guy, I just do not like wimps.

"Because I love you." Her eyes widened. The white was tainted with red. <p>

"Yes, you fucking whore," I went on. "I shall always love you as long as you are the Myriam I know. You may accidentally be weak and fall for the glamour of the moment. That would hurt me immensely. I think you know how that would hurt me. But you would still be my Myr. I'd find the strength to still love you. And hope that we would be able to get past this." Her eyes filled with tears. One spilled over and ran down her pale cheek. <p>

I went on. "But maybe, honey, maybe you are someone I don't know at all. One who can live with betraying me, with lying to me and humiliating me. Maybe you have lied about our love for years. Secretly laughed at all I held precious. Tell me, Myriam. I need to know if I can go on loving you."

Tears were running freely now. <p>

I stood and looked down on her. "Good," I said. "You go shower your fucked-out body. Then go sleep off your exhaustion." <p>

I made room for her to leave. She grabbed her purse and walked to the stairs. As she reached the first steps, I said: "You better get your act together, Myr. There is no clown in this circus." <p>

I collapsed on the couch. <p>

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Oh, Lordy, what a superb speech,,, made the man totally exhausted! <p>

Oh, the deep love for Mayr.... and, oh, the deep deceit on her part! Both crying soulful tears, for the same reasons, for different ones! God, why do you punish these frail humans so, especially this righteous man! LOL <p>

Angisophique is jokin', of course, like I am... I need to collapse on the couch, too, after this deep critique! <p>

"I shall always love you, Myr,,, but, in the mean time, go clean your cunt and brush your teeth, you whore! 'Tis so when I kiss you, I don't smell his sulfuric acidic dropplets! I call you names but remember, I love you to death, okay, honey? <p>

"I just can't stand you making a fool out of me like this, thinking I would continue to still kiss you even after you've just fellated some man, okay? I could only kiss you after you've cleaned up well!, do you hear me? You may be an unfaithful cocksucker, but I'm your husband and I am not, okay?" <p>

I mean, come on, dear good authoress! LOL

I went back today and read all your stories and realized two things. You are a hell of a writer. You write realistic dialogue that sounds like real people speaking and you create great emotional turmoil that seems to spin almost out of control. While your plots are challenging and interesting I noticed a certain consistent quality with the way you create male characters and I think it is what bugs many of the men and maybe even a few of the women readers. You do not quite capture true-to-life men. I think you create men the way you want them to be or think they should be and you do seem quite to understand the psychology of the male mind. I have to say, after finishing all your stories that feeling in particular became more and more apparent. The stories are still interesting and the situations grab at the reader and keep us reading, but from a male perspective, I do not feel you have yet presented a normal, every-day man who responds in your situations with any kind of emotion that most men would feel. I know the criticism is that your male characters are wimps and let the women stomp all over them, but that's your right as a writer to create them that way and follow the story line through to its end. I find creating realistic women characters difficult for obvious reasons. I also note that your stories try to rise above the stereotypical plot and see them in different ways and thank god you do not have a green beret, ranger, naval sniper heroes who arrange god-awful demises for all and sundry. Mary your psycho-bitch murderess does come to mind however. Like I said, I read all today. I think you like effeminate men? The males you create do not seem strongly masculine and I do not mean in the agressive, macho definition. Rather, they all seem to lack self-confidence and an inner strength that supports them in their decision making. They do not act precipetiously, but then sometimes when they do act it is with out conviction that what they choose is right; right for them. Like I said, excellent writer, but I find myself confused. I will have to wait to see how this story goes.

Thanks, Simple49.

<p>So far the story is extremely well written and realistic. Angiquesophie's characters talk and act like real people. Her men are real, not the knee-jerk reaction manly man that many Literotica readers claim they would be if they faced such a situation.</p>

<p>In real life I've never seen anyone who has reacted in the 'manyly man' way. Everyone I've known has had a major investment in a marriage, potentially devastating financial considerations (and if you think that isn't important, you are nuts!), usually children, too.</p>

<p>A real man doesn't run off in a huff. He doesn't seek immediate revenge on the cheating spouse and her lover. A real man talks to his wife and finds out what the heck happened and why, all the while trying to understand if it is possible to salvage his life.</p>

<p>A real man acts like the protagonist in this story has acted. He is not a wimp. He is a man whose life is potentially devastated and needs to know why. And he needs to know if it can be salvaged.</p>

<p>He already has the way out --- his new job in New York City. The decision: to take it and take his wife with him; to take it and leave his wife behind; or stay and fight for his current life in his current location.</p>

Loved it whether you continue it or not.

I found it absolutely gripping and felt for the poor sod.

Hope she lived to regret it, but I suspect we'll never know.

Thanks

There is no doubting your writing skills. You are good. But as for the story I will wait and see. You have a good set up here.

Well written and captivating story. But I don't understand how this is a "Hotwife" story as it is "tagged". Where is the acceptance and desire. I read this to be an unfaithful wife story of a woman who may have fallen off the fence once or more. Nonetheless, I am looking forward to more about this pair.

company she works for or on her own doesnt really matter. She is a whore. It does matter. A wife by ommission lies to her husband, cheats, degrades herself and her marriage, places herself in harms way both physically and medically, by her actions places her husband in harms way, humiliates him, and disrespects him, herself, and the marriage. I know there are some very dimwitted women out there that think it doesnt effect or affect the marriage or the husband but again those women are genetically mentally impaired and unable to comprehend their own stupidity. You painted the husband wrong. A man that high up would not have walked out and overgrown boy might have. He would have walked over and said. "hello dear, who is this man you are out with"? The confrontation would have occurred then and there in public. Simply tell her for her own good not to bother coming home, then walk back over to the gentleman offering him a position and say yes I accept it, then move immediately. Divorce is the only action short of termination that this scene allows. No woman can justify the actions she has done in this story. I was actually surprised at your story, since I fully expected the man he was meeting to have been bedding his wife all day. I do need to ask a question of the writer, if the couple makes this much money why would she have to borrow a dress, and even more so whose dress fits her so well that she could borrow it on "short" notice. Since the wife claims the gentleman was an important client from SA whose wife could not attend my suggestion is that the husbands lawyer contact the company and file alienation of affection suits on the company and then send a certified letter to the wife of the gentleman involved and file suit on him for alienation of affection also. Every action has a consequence and this stupid whore should now bring down a firestorm.

Had to give a top score when the excellent writing caused the blood to leave my extremities and my belly to do flip flops. This chapter had such an emotional punch for me. Really excellent!!! ***** There is so much the husband does not know about his wife. I hate it that this chapter was so short. Continue soon please. ***** A deep love for someone leads to an investment of self. The husband has put his all into the relationship. Has she? Don't think so. The marriage is now changed forever and it will be interesting to see where the wife takes it. I say the wife because hubby is willing to stay and explore the chance of continuing the marriage. ***** Still trembling a little from the impact of the chapter - thank you.

She is a deceitful sort of slut, the one woman to whom you trusted.To find that the woman you know and love doesn't even exist. Your whole life with her is a sham,and a she has made a mockery of your love and trust. How could you ever believe anything she told you, no mater what it was. Vengeance will not ease your pain, only totally destruction of the woman to whom you love will be your consolation. After finally seeing her broken monetarilly, physically and emotionally will your hate for her be quelled and you can get on with the rest of your life. The only problem is, what do you have left?.....Rich

As usual, your write skills are most apparent. It's a toss-up as to whether she will be able to get hubby back on her side or not... Can't wait to see where this tale goes. Thanks...

finding your new story. You´re the best on this site and this story affected me. I wonder why. maybe because of the guy´s total commitment in his relationship with Myr which is how I think it should be, whatever may happen. My reaction would have been the same: find out what is the situation as you know that Myriam would never do this without a reason. Stupid perhaps, but a question of loyalty. The sentences feel like hammers to me, putting nails into a coffin with the inevitability of a greek tragedy in our idiot modern setting.

I hope you will find the time to continue; you do not owe us readers anything, more to the contrary. In the mean time I´ll wait and hope to find it some day soon. Thanks a lot!

Erik

The writing is superb as always. Unfortunately, the plot line from this writer seems to always make it the male's fault in order to excuse these slut's behavior. At least that part is predictable. However, that is this author's specialty.

best of writing. but as usual the main characters are rather teenies than adults. they live side by side but just because everybody has to have a partner. again a woman who is unable to talk as soon as it is not about fashion. As long as the characters stay babies you can't receive more than 50%. grow up and let the characters grow up too they are all emotionally underdevelopped.

Simple49er said it well and in fact, I've said it in comments about your other stories. Your males act more like women than men. I can't fathom why Bruce would think he can salvage a marriage, no matter what he has invested in it, when he has witnessed his wife's infidelity and multiple lies. As many (including this author, I'll warrant) know, love and hate can be very close emotions, though they may seem to be opposites. When a person is deliberately betrayed by one he/she loves, one's first emotion is hurt, then denial, then anger (just like the person who suddenly learns he/she has incurable cancer). The bargaining comes next, then finally, acceptance. But Bruce seems unreal. He does not really convey to Myriam the hurt, the betrayal, and his anger seems like administering a slap rather than the genuine anger of a punch in the nose (I don't mean he should do these things to his wife, I'm of course speaking figuratively about the anger I would expect from a man who has been cuckolded). He seems reasonably intelligent, capable in business. Doesn't he know about counseling? The saying goes, he who acts as his own lawyer has a fool for a client. Does he really think he can just talk it out with his wife? Can he believe anything she says any longer? How can he ever trust her again? Or will it just be an open marriage and he will accept it, one-sided as it appears? Maybe that's the author's fantasy (I hope not, although I know some live that lifestyle -- to each their own, I guess). I'll be interested in seeing how this proceeds; I hope it won't be too long before the next chapter(s). Thanks for writing.

It's so powerful, and so painful! Some readers think the husband is a hopeless wimp--but it seems to me that, despite his humiliation and rage, he (understandably) wants to know the whole story. He hopes against hope that there's some explanation he can live with, however unlikely that is.

A great beginning--looking forward to the rest. Thanks, ohio

The only question would be why? There is no place left to go with this one.

I also had an issue with how the man jelly fished once he was hit with the sight of her on the arm of another man. The fact that she was dressed hotter than she ever dressed for him in their entire marriage was also a problem for me. I can't see a guy as successful as this guy allowing his wife to dictate the terms of their sexuality for their entire marriage. No way he'd let her relegate them to missionary only, with the occasional "from behind"...and only in the house. He'd demand more from her and over time she'd want to give more to him.<p>

So, yeah, I have a problem with the husband's weakness. That being said the story was well written and compelling and it felt like a real adult interlude rather than what 90% of the stuff on this site tends to be: silly sex fantasies.

This is an excellent story's beginning to a tale that promises to be very well worth reading. Angiquesophie's stories are outstanding. She knows how to plan and organize her thoughts and transfer them to writings. While this story has just started, the basic elements of the authors writing are clear: to the point, easy to read, flowing sentences, and a high level of respect for her characters. I can't wait for the story to continue. RAG

I greeted this with mixed emotions. It will be extremely

difficult to absorb because I feel too much for the poor husband in this author's stories. What did someone do to her to make her sure that she steps all over men? Oh well,

more relevant would be why I read it. Well it is always well written and quite creative.

Thanks for giving me some painful hours....

she is a sorry excuse for a wife. Once a cheater, always a cheater and she cheated. I know what you are saying, she is sorry, but is she sorry she cheated or sorry that she got caught. I thing she is sorry she got caught. She could not tell the truth if her life depended on it, on the best thing for the husband to do is divorce her cheating ass and move to NY where there is a job awaiting him. He will not have to pay alimony if he gets a good attorney since she is already employed. Oh, she really does not want to move to NY anyway, so things will work out the best for both of them.

but once again, the author insists on creating an unrealistic story line, because they are too lazy to take the time to make the story realistic.

Husband sees wife cheating with a lover, and he walks away. What drival, what crap. As soon as some lazy writers goes down this path, I stop reading. Why? because WE ALL KNOW that NO ONE ON THIS ENTIRE FUCKING PLANET would react that way. Only in a story where the author is desparately trying to create some future conflict does this happen. I get a kick out of the childish writing on this site... it's even better when the cuckold husbankd watches in PAIN, and does nothing. No, of course if the same author wrote about some strange guy doing something to his 10 year old child and he did nothing about it... the readers would rebel.

I have written some seriously crass statements in the past against authors on this site. They have been written because the author was preaching bullshit to advocate the dehumanizing of male or female characters in their stories. Whether this author is a lesbian or not has no barring on the story. She has written a story and the story should be regarded on "It's" merits. I happen to dislike both characters in this story. I have sympathy for the husband but if he was my friend I would tell him to grow a backbone. The wife is a lying slut and should be abandoned as quickly as possible. Will this happen? I don't know the author hasn't written it yet. I for one will give her the time to tell it. I may not even like the outcome but I will not anticipate that I will not like the outcome.

I came out as anonymous in South America down below!

Why is it the man, regardless of who is to blame, why is it the man who leaves the house, why does he sleep in the guest bedroom or on the sofa, why does the man get or take the dirty end of the stick?

There can't be more or 3 or 4 % of the, regardless of whose guilt, man leave the comforts?

TheBullet and Britease think this story features realistic men. In this one case I think it DOES indeed matter that this author is a Lesbian. Someone once pointed out in one of her early stories that Angiquesophie does not "GET" straight men because of her sexuality.

After seeing more 15 of the 30 posts in the feedback of this section point out that once again this Angiquesophie has a husband /man that appears to be qutter more than anything else, I think whoever made analysis or deduction was pretty damn sharp.

<b>The premise is absurd in Two ways.</b> And really there is no way to get around that. BRUCE thinks that when he Married Myriam he married Above his level. She was super hot and a super babe and fucking a star football player. OK fair enough.

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FIRST.. after 9 years of marriage Bruce NEVER asked her why she broke with that Football star? He nevers asks what happened to THAT guy?!?!?

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<b>How is that remotely believeable?</b> do YOU know any couple that got married in High school or college that dont talk about so and so? old boyfirends? old girlfirends?

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SECOND... <b>he hears stories about his super hot/ Gorgeous wife about her sexuality that are in DIRECT CONTRADICTION to his perceptions abut Myriam.</b> And these "stories" go back to the time before Bruce knew her.

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HUH? who the Fuck would let THAT slide???

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Lastly... At the moment Myriam is caught look how many times she LIED... by actual statements and Omiissions,

I could not count the Number of lies she told...4? ...5?

...6? She did not try to use that old excuse... <i>"this was just a 1 time thing..."</i> which is what most cheating spouses say when caught.

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was Myriam LAUGHING at him over the past 9 years? who cares? When push came to shove at that 1 decisive Moment in her life and marriage she chose to lie.

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<b>Myriam doesnt need a 2nd chance. She has already had 9 years of them.</b>

The 25 is for the talent shown. The minus 75 is for the continued weak spineless braindead wimps you spawn.<P>

Any man of slight self worth would have confronted her - asked her to dance and to explain herself but that wouldn't fit your contrivance to drag out his subish self disrespect and the opportunity for her to debase him quietly and long term painfully without pity nor explanation.<P>

You seem to seek pain here from the men and women who view life with a sense of reality. Why is that? It is a continuously repetitive refrain in all your work and therefore a shameful waste of ability not to serve your audience and potential want to be fans.<P>

Obsession to be disdained by most is a puzzling desire especially when frequently demanded. I think you need help.<P>

Like most of us I hope this story will turn out differently but I doubt that given your beginning. It is the same weak apologetic I love you regardless of who you fuck as long as you tell me why and don't flaunt it by coming home full of another real man's cum to embarrass me too often.<P>

You - writer are too predictable, unlike life and unlikeable - hence the generous amount of rotting tomatoes strewn across your unrealistic stage.

good start. anxious to see what happens next.

But auther doesn't understand men, husbands in general, husbands who won't stand for a cheating wife to make a joke of their marriage. She doesn't understand he would be better off without her, so will see where story goes but I don't have much hope. Don't like the couple much, see if you can work on that also.

It amazes me to find once again that so many commentators who refer to themselves as "anonymous" appear to be unable to appreciate good writing when they see it -- or is it perhaps that they are filled with loathing either for the author or for the subject here portrayed?

In my opinion, the author has provided a sharply drawn account of the beginning of a crisis in a marriage. The dialogue is crisp and realistic; the depiction of emotion strikes home; and the suspense regarding the husband's future is almost palpable. The story line and the execution both point to a superior writer. Thanks, Angiquesophie: I eagerly await the next chapter.

Care to explain how this is the beginning of crisis in this marriage? The beginning was the husbands stupidity and the wifes total lack of morals and respect for her husband.

Wonderful writing Angiqueophie. Your stories are always brilliantly written and this one is typical. The only criticism I might make is the scenario betwen husband and wife when she arrives home after having been out all night and doesn't show a trace of guilt, she just wants a shower and 8 hours sleep, That is not normal reaction when wife gets caught and husband then gets coffee for both of them next morning --just totally abnormal. Still a great story though great suspence build up --can hardly wait for next chapter,

60 year old George

Your writing always puzzles me. On one hand an impressive rich writing style, while on the other hand the content is embarrassing in its incredibility superficiality and formulaic narrative line. It's the same bewildering broken internal narrative of a guy which consists of ramblings, misplaced pseudo romantic statements mixed with fits of anger. Along with it we encounter, again, the same prototype of the female as a monstrous male destroyer. Just like in previous stories she is cool calculating amoral and almost bigger than life in her ability to hide and change appearances behaviors and personalities in a blink of an eye. It resonates with the Greek mythological creatures set to destroy the frail human beings…<P>

My only question: -will we see some time in the future a break through in the gallery of the usual suspects of this author? How about presenting simple (as in real and complex) characters? I have no doubt you can handle it, you know - without the histrionics and the mega faux Drama (take a pick at thecelt’s “the mechanic” for an illustration of good detailed character work.)

I felt as if it were happening to me and that is the highest compliment. You do this as well as any and better than most.

or selling his love. TK U MLJ LV NV

A very interesting story. I am curious as to why he wants so much detail. He already knows she cheated on him and has shown that he has the weakness of the willing cuckold. If her fucking around in a well known place in his town where anyone could see her making him a cuckold isn't enough for him to dump her then what is the point of the details? Does he think he can somehow find something in them to help him salvage some self-respect? Not hardly, but perhaps I misjudge him. Let's read on.

Two pages of high drama between two, three, possibly four characters. So far husband and wife are taking form, but the two other male characters are still in mist. I've enjoyed angiquesophie's commentaries but have never taken the time to read an entire story. This chapter one seems to draw me and I have the day free. Such a boon.

Still a favorite. Still love it. Still five stars.

After being caught, there was no I'm sorry, at the time he told her he seen her. What a cunt!!! I cant believe how cavalier she was at the table about the whole thing. A wife of what 9, 10 years, and she thought she was hurt on her wrists? Can you say self centered? Another wonderful woman.

I cant wait till the next chapter to find out what he does. Oh I know he is confused, mad, tired, exposed to anyone that was there as a cuckold. This is going to be an emotional time for him. Love and Hate at the exact same time.

It couldn't be any clearer, she is a heartless Cunt who has been cheating for a long time and thinks nothing of it. She does everything with other guys and nothing with her no balls sissy husband. She showed that at the hotel. You can fill in the rest. No need for any more chapters as any guy with any self respect would just divorce the Cunt. Who cares how long or for what reason. Fuck! you already know it's because she has no respect for you so why keep going unless you are a sissy loser.

Shot the bitch

Why the hell do you writers ALWAYS have the guy getting sick and slinking away????

He should have walked over while she was kissing the guy, grabbed his ass and decked him hard and told her not to come home!

I don’t get why the device of regurgitation is used so often when some fellow find out the wife is unfaithful. It doesn’t make sense to me. Like to know what he did about the promotion.

BTB SHE GETS FUND LAYING ON HER BACK LEGS AKIMBO.

why didn't he take picture on his camera when they were kissing.

Lost interest already.....never was a fan of willing wimp cuckolds.

Thanks for sharing.

Another writer obsessed with making husbands weak and wanting to be cheated on. The wife is sleeping around openly cheating on her loyal husband and it isn’t ok. The writer wants us to believe the husband will accept it and another cuckold will be hatched. Not in the real world

Now at best a 2. Not a terrible tale, but lots of fluff.

Has he made a decision as he states, or waiting for the truth? I don't think a spouse who cheats in public can really change.

Something is missing ...

Stayed good, ended this chapter with a "huh?".

What husband could resist that glorious moment when the stars aligned, and gave you the opportunity to cut in on their intimate dance. S.M.H.

Hufff....another wonderfull voyage ahead.

"Assumption is the mother of error."

Until facts emerge? He needs to close his face.

Leave the cheating bitch permanently.

I am going to read ch 2, but itcannot change enough to make me like or care for the pussy husband. What a wimp.

Dudes a meat salesman? Really? Shoulda shown him your shoe leather, missed opportunity

In every story...always these stupid whores who can't help themselves.

This author paints rather graphic portraits of what women are. And what a woman is according to her...is not something fair and beautiful.

No matter the pretty packaging her female characters come wrapped in...they all turn out to be horrifically ugly. Monsters really. Twisted creatures capable of unthinkable cruelty. At best simply evil...at worst sociopaths bent on causing ad much damage as possible. Molded by life to inflict pain.

It truly is...sort of "her thing". She writes these characters so well. As from her own experiences. They even fail as an "anti-hero"...as I've not read one that I have felt even a shred of sympathy about.

They all are ruined in the end. Beyond redemption. Even when, in those rare stories where the author tries to write a reconciliation? That's where she fails miserably.

She is so completely successful at writing these hateable and contemptible creatures...so convincing of their evil nature...that any attempt at redemption just comes across as unbelievable. Making other characters who might actually forgive the atrocities the female main character so freely meted out look...well...makes them look insane really.

After this first installment...I have a feeling I'm going to be reading a great deal more sociopathic behavior followed by an mentally insane husband?

What a good start to what promises to be an exciting story. I really like your writing style and the way you describe feelings, thoughts, impressions. Your writing deserves a 5-😊😊😊😊😊.

Ignore the dumbells who comment on your characters and their actions as if they were real. This category seems to draw an inordinate number of men who are unable to tell the difference.

They will read every chapter and trash each one right after beating off in the bathroom. Keep on writing. You’re good !

There only needs to be one more chapter in this story.

A chapter that details the separation and divorce. How they go their separate ways. And move on with life.

That's it. Immediate divorce. Nobody loves a woman enough to put up with her being a whore for other men.

The sheer audacity necessary. To lie. To lie again. To lie right to your spouse's face when he already knows you are lying. It's evil. Or mental illness. Or both. No need to read any more.

Holy Frijole…

This was excellent work. The tension created was near overwhelming. No matter the direction the narrative takes from here, I have already gotten more than my money’s worth.