by RainierWriterII
There must be a sequel to this story. Its unthinkable for there not to be.
You have to continue this story, I see so much potential for this story line.
oh my god more made me so wet reading this sequel please and soon
man what happened u were doing great and now nothing. please write more ur one of best new writers.
Wow. A story that is more than slam bang thank you maam.
The charactors responded well together. The sex was hot.
I really enjoyed the domination of family here very good story thanks
either, but, this story worked pretty well. Pacing is fine. Characters are a bit cardboard compared to your other tales but maybe it's the dom-sub thing. The descriptions of the sex acts needs some attention too. Describe all the senses during sex - not just visual. Still - this is yards better than most.
I enjoyed the added touch of the spankings to establish his role as the Alpha Male in their lives. There are a lot of areas yet to be shown, like publlic display. If there is a sequel, I hope he brings the mother and daughter into the same bed for a threesome.
Story has good balance of pain, sexual release and dominant control with a firm, but also gentle hand from the Uncle. I can't stand the beat someone to a bloody pulp style of writing, that is just pent up self hatred. This is stimulating and causes the heart to race as the story is taken to the next level.
Liked the women being in different locations, waiting for their turn, wondering what pleasures were in store for them.
Please continue. Will Kevin fuck his niece? Will he get his sister and niece pregnant? Does he move in with them?
Brilliant, but needs to be continued with another 2 chapters. Chapter 2 should have his niece losing her virginity to him and chapter 3 introduce mother and daughter to lesbianism and finally maybe chapter 4 Culminating in a ménage a trois
I agree with a couple of the other people on here concerning the need to have additional segments.I think Kevein should introduce Traci to be a better lover and then while he is disciplining both women, introduce them to mutual love of each other,and then into the joys of a 3 way with each other.There are so many variables here to be explored, and many needed chapters to be written! keep up the good work you have started.PS. As an added bonus, you could also introduce some of the wrong crowd to the family disciplinarian and go forward from there as well! This could provide you with some additional writing ideas for some rather steamy copy!
such a good story. great pace and dialogue. didn't want it to end!
An interesting story, slightly spoiled by small errors which proofreading would have spotted.
Loved it, had me so wet, I don't think I've cum down yet...whew.
I love stories of D/s but torn when I read the quick submissions of the female characters. Must be the struggle of strong women who are actually subs behind close doors...the realist in me
Yes and there definitely needs to be many more chapters, can we get a series
EXCELLENT!
A beautiful romantic plotline, that moved at a good pace, well written with only minor errors that should have been found with independent proofreading, when you self proofread an article you are aware of what was originally intended.
Further adventures for these three characters are most definitely needed, does he move in with the girls or have them join him, did Traci make the necessary changes? Has Karen's attitude altered? Where did the relationship go.
My God, why are we limited to only 5 stars!! This would have been an easy 7 or 8. Not higher only for the lack of fucking either or both of his sister and niece. Hopefully there is another chapter soon.
P.S. This was much better than "Chrissy Goes To The Clinic". Thank you, RW!