All Comments on 'Unexpected Turn of Events Ch. 04'

is his father alive? and who is alpha of the pack in scotland? i assume his dad if he's alive but then why would cullen have to check up on it?

is it the stepmom wanting to cause trouble?

anyhow, I like that they are both so stubborn...though I'd like them to give in enough to actually get together, it will be fun seeing them butt heads a bit. looking forward to more of the story.

Thank you for making it easier to understand with the POV. It's actually funny how very similar Angel and Cullen really are. Things should be getting interesting very soon! Can't wait! But now, there is going to be a new twist? So who is the...villian(?)/ bad person out to get Angel? Is it the stepmother or stepbrother? My bet is on the stepmother! lol.

Cant wait for the rest.

**BTW to one of the comments above...Cullen's father is dead. He died a while back. It was mentioned in ch. 2. And Cullen is the Alpha. Cullen and his pack are originally from Scotland. But due to business and pack members spreading to America, he travels from one country to another. But he always signs one of his betas' to watch over things when he is gone. Thats why right now, Duncan (a beta) is in Scotland watching over things until Cullen comes back. **

I hope this helps. :)

nice job...knowing that Angel is Cullen mate. he will need to keep calm because Angel will fight him to the very end...i liked it. who is his stepmother, and why does she want to kill angel. does she want the throne for her own son... he's not the first born. what about his father, why is he letting the stepmother make all the decisions

You did great with the POV on this one. Much easier to read and understand.

I love the dynamics you have created with Angel and Cullen. Both coming from similar backgrounds, both lacking in trust, and both stubborn as hell. This can only lead to a hot and fiery relationship, that I look forward to watching. And messing w/ an Alpha's mate, the sparks are going to fly over that one. I'm so looking forward to the next chapter.

nice job with this chapter. :) i can't wait to read more. please write fast. :)

than the others. Fixing the points of view so that the whole chapter was in the third person really made a big difference. Well done. I liked the plot before but found the story hard to read. Now I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

you shaped up the POV's! it's much easier to read again.

and now let the plots and twists and turns begin.

DA DA DUM!!!

You had kinda deviated from julie's work there for a while but really????? Step mother with the half brother who can do no wrong. Step brother is obviously a bad guy but lacking he brains to be the true bad guy. It's the wedding all over again but with werewolves -________-

be annoyed every single time I read that phrase. There are other ways to say 'couldn't help but.' This chapter (as far as I got, which wasn't too far) was better perspective wise, but it seems you forgot that Angel and Cullen just officially met in the last chapter and that this chapter is just an extension of that one...hence, it's the same day though you make it seem as if there are days between her meeting him that morning and being with him that evening. I'm with Zigpup completely...Oy is correct.

"Sighing softly, Cullen took another sip of his drink. Women, can't live with them, can't live without them. No truer words were ever spoken. " -

That's a lie...... You can live without Women, you just need to be Gay!

you do kind of need women for EVERYTHING!

men are completely hopeless at most things, and even if you ARE gay, my friend the Anonymous bloke, you still need your MOTHER.

but anywho, I liked the story.

Cullen needs to stop being such an arse...

onto the next chapter!

k_k

Up to now nearly all of Cullen's interactions with Angel mirror the behavior of her father to her mother. Possesive , demanding , controlling, even to the point of grabbing her to make her give into his demands, be it a kiss or to lead her someplace. I guess that is typical of the "abused" woman that seem to end up with the same type of man over and over again. Will see how this plays out.

Canadian Cowboy

So far, I am enjoying your story. However, you really need to do something about your grammar. Lots of errors through out your chapters.

The characters are immature, annoying and the reactions seem unrealistic.

Your characters are unlikeable. They come across as immature, overly angry, volatile, and quite frankly, I’m left just walking away from their annoying personalities. You have two avoidant attachment personalities being overly immature and it’s just not working.