All Comments on 'Unforseen Outcome'

...instead of eating someone elses? I'll never understand that particular fetish.

So he had "compromising" pictures, big deal. The Dr. was fucking every nurse there so how would releasing the photos be incriminating? Throw in the assault charges against Jerome and Marcus and the fact that every guy in the precinct would stomp the fuck out of anyone messing with their comrade and that as a firefighter he would have to be in top shape.....well, not only is this story untrue, it is the epitome of excrement.

Perhaps Fawguy would be so kind as to never write a story again. Because he sucks ass.

it suits you better

Why not just do what is really wanted an suck that cock for the cream.

sickening

Obviously well written as the trolls in LV believe it to be all true! LOL

though a bit over the top!

Why not get the creampie from the source? Saves a step. What an odd story. Do people really act this way? Pretty lame if you ask me. Well written but.....

her sister would make a better wife, unfortunately both women are BBC hos

one dead wife, two dead nigger and one dead doctor! anything less is cuckie shit just like this wimp story.

PEOPLE DON'T COMMIT FELONIES TO GET LAID YOU FUCKING RETARD!!! Seriously, what are you? 15, 16? You say you're a straight male over 60??? What a joke. If you are, you've had the most pathetic life imaginable.

Really stupid set of crimes if one were to employ them to manipulate women... But that aside i quite enjoyed the slightly over the top revenge.

Just a note for anon - ever heard of the crime of RAPE! People do commit felonies to have sex. Ever heard of date tape drugs?

Enough said. Is there a place to rate stupid anon comments?

There was much of this that pissed me off but I held on to the end. Stupid woman who can control past her orgasms, asshole with a big dick (from all the stories there must not be another kind) and a dumb assed clueless husband. Some name mix ups and missing letters/words make it an unclean story. A rushed revenge made it an unsatisfying read. I was glad there was a revenge even if it was rushed and forced. Not your best story and not even going to believe its true but I'm glad I stuck it out.

You are a sick little fuck stick, cream pies are gay, period.

Geez...

The sequence of finishing your writing, then putting it down for a day or so, then reading it AS THOUGH it is unknown to you, is the way EDITING is started. If parts don't quite make sense, or some words are misspelled, or names are wrong (or who it IS is ambiguous), or the timeframe is off or unclear - et cetera - then FIX it. Actually, in the case of THIS offering, if the tale, which originally seemed such a brilliant idea, now just seems weird - then maybe just ShitCan the whole thing.

Hubby is a senior fireman, but has to be given a pick-axe handle as an equalizer??? Don't have access to a discarded firehose nozzle? Or a broken fire-axe handle? Shit, the author thought to have the avengers bring honey for the poor rats...why couldn't he plan his story a little better...BTW - I don't believe pure ethanol has any special properties that the same quantity of alcohol diluted as whisky does not ALSO have! Faster, yes, especially if injected.

Great story, thanks for sharing it with us!

Well, you do need an editor, but the lack was not such a big deal. Pure alcohol is just that alcohol, better to have invented a drug. Eating your own cum out of a pussy's not so much of a big deal, so I was good with that. Now the one time fling by the wife, not so much, but what the hell, it's fiction, right? .Now the first time she was "blackmailed" was the time to get revenge, IMO. So I enjoyed the story. Not my fetishes, but what the hell. Having a couple or three biddies go after them at the wedding anaversary party would have been good too, maybe better.

Anyway, good story.

Chilley

I get that Fawguy is an easy target because his protagonists are ineffectual & bumbling for most of his stories. In my opinion many of his tales deserve higher ratings but this one .... Not so much.

His strong points are portraying marital strife caused by lack of economic resources and a descriptive eye for depicting English settings. That was at a minimum this time out. There were positive aspects in this story like the retaliatory SIL affair but overall this was a strain to read.

I hold this writer in esteem for his overall body of work. He has had better stories before and will do excellent ones in the future as ling as Fawguy tries to improve his skills in the dicey and oft judgmental field of Loving Wives.

this is wimp story,not LW story -1*

by the standards of a cuck story, for the first three pages. It went to hell when the husband and Amy had sex, and the ending was just fantasy shit. Perhaps you could rewrite this with a better ending, like he "mans up" and throws the slut out.

....rats eating their genitals off?!?!! Gotta say, that seemed kinda original to me. The plausibility of the legal stuff seemed dubious at best, but I don't let those kind of facts interfere with the suspension of disbelief. I really think he should have been able to take action against the doctor sooner. While it seemed to be important to have Marcus's help in taking down the doc, didn't he have a whole crew of firemen who would back him up instead, if he only had asked for help? Meanwhile, inviting the doc to the anniversary should have been something he could have put his foot down on. Her justification seemed weak AND VERY suspicious. After he was attacked in the bathroom, it was overdue to call the cops, and even end the party. How he could have let her out of his sight for even one minute??? It just doesn't seem plausible at all. It seemed to work out though, and they reconciled, but continuing with a kinky lifestyle just seemed over the top. The circumstances, as described, should be enough to turn any one off of that lifestyle FOREVER. All along, she was selfish, and cared more about her "reputation" at work than his feelings. But the lack of simple common sense, would be the thing that I think he would have the hardest time getting over. Her actions prooved her to be too stupid to be able to avoid this kind of shit in the future. I guess nailing her much younger sister was an adequate reward for putting up with her lies, betrayal, and her selfishness. The great irony of the title WAS the best part of the story, however. While it may have been an "unforeseen outcome" to the characters, the readers could see this coming a mile away.

THIS WAS AN AWSOME,TRULY AWSOME STORY AND I AM SO GLAD THAT IT TURNED OUT WELL FOR YOU AND ALL OTHERS AS IT SHOULD.....

LIKE YOU I ENJOOY A NICE DRIPPING CREAM PIE BUT IT IS ALWAYS OF MY OWN MAKING AND MY WIFE IS WITH ME ALMOST 24/7 AS I AM A LORY DRIVER.

AGAIN CONGRATS

I Don't know what inbred, backwords, retarded country you come from. but in england there is more than one type of person, because we are not inbred. please get your facts straight next time you bloody twat.

At least in this one there is some measure of justice. Now if he could just stop letting the slut women off the hook. As has been pointed out in other submissions, the end seems rushed...either he lost interest in the story or didn't know how to end it. In any event, the women come off too lightly by far. Some will say she got hers with the last meeting. I call BS. At no point did I ever get the impression she was truly remorseful...and she needs to be, even if it ends up being forced on her.

1*

no matter what the instrument is that affects, TK U MLJ LV NV

Homo shit with eating sperm on this site?!! Fucking sick

And another thing - You get control of your wife’s rapists and they are still alive?

Just go have a cup of tea and then kill yourself you worthless pussy.

I can see where all the fags would love this story but I had to give it up halfway through the story as Ma gag reflexes were beginning to take over.

Another unbelievable story that is too stupid to follow. Husband is an idiot and moron. Wife and sister are sick and twisted sluts and the group together needs to be voted off the island

Without that it would have been less the 1* (if I could). He was an idiot and continued to be one after everything. Cream pies are disgusting. He would have deserved it if he got an STD from the Dr.'s cream pie.