by Dinsmore
This type of story has been worn out. Done a million times. You know, the one where you find out, in the last sentence or two, that the two lovers are blood reletives.
i found it very exciting it got me aroused keep it up and don't listen to the negativity.
Short but really delightfully dirty right from the start.Ending has been done before many times but still a surprise.
I loved your story and would really enjoy reading about what happenes with the sister, please do a follow up to this one.
A good story, however, some of the words are out of context, some words are misplaced, punctuation could be better to allow easier flow of the story, I do believe the ending should be changed and this story should be thrw into the "Anal - The butt, and nothing but." category... Just a thought.
With luck,
-NyMpHoMaNiAc-
Each piece is original to the writer, forget the narrow mindedness of people who read it through to the end to complain about it, yet can't spell the words they are trying to imply, no right at all to pick up on your mistakes when theirs are paramount! Very well written, as are all of your pieces. Keep up the good work!
My dick could make a better story. Your dumb ass story made my dick soft. Go home. You suck dog cock.