All Comments on 'Vampire Sorority'

I 'll be looking forward to seeing how this plays out good job at capturing my interest.

Interesting plot line. Can't wait to read more.

A little strange how perspectives shift in the same paragraph. Perhaps a section break or something would work better.

I really enjoyed editing this story, and hope another chapter eventually gets written, maybe on Halloween. I caught at least one spelling error, though, that apparently I missed. :(

The main issue is that there were multiple instances where paragraphs were fused together that shouldn't have been, where different scenes are joined. Is this something that gets done on the submission end by the author or the Lit editor who approves the story for submission? This is confusing to me as an editor and a reader...

Nicely paced, suitably erotic, gently horrific! This is an excellent start that leaves me wanting more.