by sexichick69
I loved the story. A little short but very hot nonetheless. I'm looking forward to story #2.
I agree it was a little short but also good for a first time writer.
Definately a nice read for it being your first time. You have to start somewhere and I bet each one you do will only get better. Keep up the good work.
A little short, and needing a few format tweaks, but I hope you continue to write!
Really, this was your first effort? Nice. Well written, short and sweet. Loved it!