by Munachi
Lovely piece of writing - even more so as I think English isn't your first language. Really beautiful expression of love and emotion. Thanks, Elle
A story like a rock, quiet, natural, a bit rough around the edges and yet smooth and peaceful despite the tragedy it depicts. Simply beautiful. Best of luck in the contest.
Love it. Gave it a well deserved 5, Munachi. Loved the flow and the way you built the story. Makes me wanna steal it :)
A sad but loving story. Nice effort.
Whereas all that I write is fiction, I still draw on my real experiences to write my stories, and that makes me wonder how much of your story is true.
A truly captivating piece of writing. I could feel
the rock under my fingers. Kudos, munachi!
Very well written romantic tragedy. Got some serious emotions going with this one, and that was just me! The characters were well done on that point too.
Sensitively told story of love and loss. Beautifully structured to manipulate the reader's emotions.
If this is a true story, I hope that in time you will feel better. If this is fiction, it had too much angst and whine to make it a good read. Sorry. But since posters have given you praise you shouldn't feel bad.
... aber auch gewaltig traurig. Hatte Tränen in den Augen beim Lesen. Werde beim nächsten Trip alle Knoten doppelt gut prüfen. Schreib weiter!
Over the last year or so, I have become a fan of your writing. What a moving tale of loss you have told here.
Well done, and good luck.
Nicely executed. There were a couple of little hiccups that reminded me English is not your first language, but damn. It is mine and I can't use it as well as you!
Beautifully done, munachi. Definitely a romance - although bittersweet.
I'm a fan of the bittersweet end... perfect. Thank you.
Selena
Strong, moving story. I really liked the cadence of this one. Well done, and good luck.
This story should have a disclaimer. It is much too depressing to be considered erotica.
daisy
Made me cry too. It's a lovely story and masterful writing, really. It felt like a movie actually, rather than just words on a page. Excellent. I don't know how you keep getting better with everything you write.
I thought it was poorly written outside of the fact that it did not belong on this site. Somebody point out exactly what was erotic about this story.
the nay-sayers. Not all who read here are looking for a quick stroke. It was a very moving piece that almost brought tears to my eyes (it was too short for the tears to develop properly, LOL). It's in the romance category, not erotic couplings, for pete's sake! It may feel like a chick-flick, but as I've seen, many chicks & even guys like it. So congrats on winning, and keep on writing!
well written but so horibly painful as to make me weep. i have lost people and cannot bear this type of story. it is good for its genre but i really wish i had not read it, my heart is broken.
a perfect story of love. 5
sorry you are not here writing anymore.
every tale has an unhappy ending, eventually.
A beautiful testament to an all too brief love affair.
Great story, but so sad end.
I was a climber when I was young, and I have see some falls in accidents, but never ended in tragedy, fortunately.
5 * for you.
I apologize for my English (yet), is not my native language.
The worst thing is that life always have to go on we can't stop but the space Connaught cannot get fulfilled again we make Bridge but it always fall apart.
Beautiful story thanks for sharing. 5*
...Faltu (means dead soul)