by karabryn
Interesting technique using second and first person, although I don't how I feel about your knowing the exact thoughts and feelings of the second person.
Thanks for the comment. The first and second person writing is an experiment and we'll see how it works out.
Really good story. I love your writing and I ended up wondering why it was such a turn-on, but it was.
This is quite original, 4 stars from me! She could follow it up with a text telling him no touching it till they Skype then make him edge and tease himself.... This has much potential! Thanks for a cool new story
I've been teased like this.
Tha ks for bringing that back!
Well written, and I'm looking forward to read how the characters develop.