All Comments on 'Whole Heart'

Now you are making ME cry for a change! Good luck with the contest!!

Beautiful, stirring, hot, poignant. This story has it all. ~Imp

I hung on to each word, never wanting it to stop. You did a great job of capturing their emotions. Bravo! Good luck!

Just beautiful, Carson. I'm too weepy to write a long comment. But this is weepy in a good way, you were right. -TH

Weepy, poignant, moving, I loved it!!

Please please please keep it up that way!!

;-)

I always look forward to your submissions...please keep up the fabulous work.

That was truly beautiful, I was so moved and surprisingly tittilated!

Old songs, the war, the trains...sigh, the memories shared. I was there too.

I read this in draft and it just kept getting better. By the time I reached the conclusion I was wiping tears, but smiling as well. This is a deep and touching story that really brings the best of the season - both the beauty and the melancholy, wrapped up in and creating each other.

I feel so mushy inside right now. Excellent story. Keep up the good work!

You read something so well written and so complete in both thought, mood and flow as to make the words blend into a picture in your mind. While not my normal genre, this is a piece that is so complete its appeal is universal to all who love the written word and its ability to move the soul, even if the erotic appeal isn't your usual.

Perhaps once or twice a year I come upon such a piece. Take your bows Carson and collect your laurels. They are richly deserved.

-Colly

I absolutely love these lines...

"I didn't know enough to even know this act had a name. I thought I'd invented it this very minute, just for him."

You captured those moments when lovers feel like there's no one, nothing else on earth... thank you for a beautiful story!

Oh this was just marvelous!

Heartbreakingly sweet, (ok, a word I know was used a lot, but there's not other way to describe it), it's a wonderful tale of first love and first time.

The whole story played like an old movie in my head, cracked film and bad colourization and all. I'll never see or hear "White Christmas" the same way again.

As Colleen said, collet your laurels Carson, they are well deserved!

Emerald

Exquisite writing, Carson. Lovely, lovely story, and with such an "I'm right there" quality for the reader. I'm rooting for you in the contest, you're 'no contest' for me. Best, P.

And so lovely. An emotive evocative read without becoming too sappy! Thank you!

Somebody stole my word! "Poignant"... let's see; nobody's said "Wow" yet, have they?

The historical 'jump' of years was like adding cream to peaches. I could echo previous comments, but this is enough. (I did find a typo)

This was just spellbinding. I do hope u win. All the very best.

You deserve the praise. I don't give a lot of five's and didn't give you one--you earned it.

Rumple

You tugged at my heart and my...a bit lower. ;) You are just *good* at this writing thing. I envy your ability to consistently produce work of such high caliber. Well done!

Luck,

Yui

Carson, This is fabulous. You never fail to amaze me with your grasp on the inner workings of teenaged men. You accurately capture the angst and nervousness and carefree ways of youth. The entire story engaged me, but this line was my favorite: "I didn't know enough to even know this act had a name. I thought I'd invented it this very minute, just for him. When he let out a muffled gasp of pleasure I felt so proud of myself. I was a sexual inventor." So well done! Thanks!

wow...that was beautiful. your story was so sweetly erotic, yet more sweet than erotic in my opinion. I loved the last line...it made me tear.

Ahh this is now my 3rd time attempting to comment. I should have given up by now, but this story was so good I just NEED to leave one. I loved it; it was beautiful. I thought it was so sweetly erotic, yet more sweet than erotic. And I loved the last line...it made me tear up.

This is a beautiful story, really touching, well written and moving, thank you so much.

I have to tell this has to be one of the best stories i've read in a long time. It was very tender and touching. I'm really glad I went ahead and read it. Awesome story!

Well-written, well-thought-out, well-punctuated...I loved it! Normally I just read, cum and forget the story but this one's getting bookmarked! Amazing! I love the details, the words handing images to your inner eye...Keep up the good work, dude!

~~~>K

This is a blue chip story. Thankfully, they appear irregularly - because that's what makes them special. Good prose, erotic fiction or otherwise, will always draw in an appreciative reader. Well done, and I'll look for others from you.

This was sweet and touching. A wonderful read. Great job and you deserve first place. Amazing truly! Thank you!

I like all of your stuff, but this one is the best. So sweet, so loving, yet still erotic.

There's nothing like a shared moment that fades away, but is not forgotten. That was awesome!

"I thought I'd invented it this very minute, just for him."

This sentence is so perfect. There is nothing about this sentence that I am not madly in love with.

What a great story! So touching and sweet... Really wonderful! I love stories that make tears come to my eyes. They don't necessarily have to be overly graphic, just enough to describe the situation, and I think you've managed perfectly in doing this. Thank you and keep it up!

It's well-written and so sweet. Lovely work.

sweetsubsarahh

You fucking made me bawl like a baby... I hate you... Your story was a brilliant stroke of genious... But I still hate you cause I'm still bawling...

WHY must you always write so poetic that it makes me cry?

Wonderful story - well constructed - with lovely, touching immagery. Loved it - and will read it again and again. Thank God it is not one of the filthy gay stories - but one of the ones about love.

That. Was absolutely amazing. I'm speechless.

I don't have any trouble understanding why you have so many female fans, carson. This story was very touching and sensually written. I'm slowly working my way through all of your stories and enjoying them all.

I can see why this one was a contest winner. It has all the realism, heat, and subtle heroism that I've been loving in your other stories, but with just the right amount of c-mas spark. It was also very romantic, but in a good way. Thank you for reminding me so sweetly and sensuously of my own heart and of feelings from the past. I also loved the setting, the time, the train, the hotel...great mix of elements for a Christmas story.

Only one word fits. Beautiful.

Could you write something for your str8 female fans? Your stories are so wonderfully written. Keep up the great work!!

There is no other word to describe the story!!!

Beautiful it is!

This was so beautiful. Made me cry. I keep trying to kid myself that I don't believe in romance outside of my stories but every now and again a story such as yours gets to me and smashes my theory to pieces. A truly mesmerising story. Thank You. xxx

This is a uniquely sweet love story. The sex is very fine, but even better is the character study of two absolutely beautiful young men finding deep bonds between them beyond all the silly little differences that separate them.

Sweet innocent moving and lovely story. Well developed characters Thanks for really good read

I started to cry when I read about him getting faint, dizzy and being at peace. I thought he was going to die, but thankfully I was wrong and that made me cry too. I'm a little punk ass I guess.

Heartbreaking, no pun intended. They could have loved each other. I ache for them, for a missed opportunity.

I love it. It is a beautiful story. But I do agree, I wish they had ended up together or atleast ended up being friends and kept in touch

that's pretty much all I can say about it. While I enjoy the more conventional love stories with the happy ending and everything, this story was rich and honest, more like a (good) modern novel, and I thoroughly appreciated it. Thanks, though, for not giving either of the lovers a tragic death. Had about all I can take of that.

An extremely touching story. I wish they could have somehow reconnected. I am in a similar position in my own retirement, and I have tried several times to locate old friends with whom I have had similarly close contacts 50-60 years ago. I heard from only one, but his letter made me feel so happy.

Without the note at the end of the story saying that the story is a fiction, i'd have thought that this was a real story; it just seems so realistic, and I totally with everyone else, they should at least re-connect in friendship.

I usually hate historical stories but I absolutely loved this one. Fan-Fucking -Tastic! !!!!

Halfway through first page I was thinking, 'Aren't I a bit too old for fairy tales?'. But all's well that ends well, and I know I'll read this again. The ending is still reverberating through my mind.

WONDERFUL STORY

greatest part of life are the memories

cp

Not your usual gay erotica fare! I can see why it won an award! Congratulations!

Hey Carson, thanks for sharing your work. I'm on my fourth of your stories and the more I read the more impressed I am. Characters, plots, and settings are imaginative and convincingly woven to create compelling stories. Thoroughly engaging and very sexy. I can't get enough. Hope you find love in your own life, and time to write more after you finish your degree(s). I'd pay for your work.

Best to you in all your endeavors!

Nice! Really,that's all I can say. Really great!

Exceptionally well done. Tenderness. The characters softly wrapped up in cocoons of small places. Beautifully intimate.

I don't re-read stories. Once I read it, I'm done with it for good. But this story has me coming back a lot for the passion, the innocence, the love. storied like these are what keep literature going in the sweetest of ways. It's a shame society judges or else this would be a best seller.

Not the ending I wanted or expected but the ending I needed; so hauntingly beautiful and sweet.

Jerry should have gone home with Russell.

Your work is inspiring. It is calling me to up my game. I wonder what your time off from writing fiction, in Literotica, has done for you. Are you feeling the itch to write fiction again? Or, maybe you are writing under a different name, different genre? Whatever you are up to, I wish you the best of luck... and seriously hope to see more stories of yours in the future.

Cheers!

Exquisite in its completeness. A moment in time that expressed true love, caring and the healing power of innocent humanity. You are a writer of incredible skill and heart. I wept . . .

Thank You, Ab

Such a beautiful and absorbing story. I lived it with them.

Oh goodness, this was absolutely beautiful! I loved every part and the ending made me cry as if I'd read a long novel. Amazing job!

This is fucking sad yet beautiful. Now my heart is aching, too.

Thank you for memories long forgotten. Jerry speaks them and Russell sings them.

So sad, cold, and warm all at the same time. Gave me the warm fuzzies

This story broke my heart and had me in tears. I love writing that contains touches of fantasy and possibilities of what might have been. The melancholy tone of the story is somewhat heartbreaking but lovely. I wish Jerry had gotten off the train with Russell.

What a beautiful story! You have a remarkable talent. You're not given to endless ornamentation, but instead you've cut to the very hearts of your characters...who, incidentally have become ingrained in the heart of the reader. I was truly blessed by this lovely memoir of a lost love, but filled me with hope and thankfulness that even loss can end in a sense of wonder and purpose.

Wow! 🥰 that was great.

I read this excellently written sweet, sad story two years ago. It resonated with me even more because I was born in Gary, lived in Chicago and fondly remember Christmastime there. This writing makes me cry because of unrealized possibilities and love lost. Beautiful.

Wow, just wow.

I've read this one several times.

IT's beautifully written.