All Comments on 'Why?... 02'

She wouldn't marry him because she thought he was poor. Wanted to keep the good life ,so they just plugged away in sin. That's not love. All of a sudden he checks with his lawyer and finds he is wealthy too. So now she will accept him and his money. Calls the fatherin law and gets some kind of sick revenge over his daughter in law telling him no more controll. That is so far out and both angles kill this story.

But too coincidental and too preposterous. Of course I like a happy ending when the cheaters lose {in this case their lives) and when the innocent spouses win. But this is too unreal. It was well written and a nice fairy tale and I did enjoy the read. I just took it with a grain of salt. Thanks.

Leave it to Mikoli to put a fucked up twist in the story. She would not marry him if he was poor. He refused to live off of her. So they would never marry. Her money from her ex's estate or father-in-law is more important than love to her, and his pride and what others think to him. How sick.

Now he finds out he is wealthy, she is gaga, and its, "ohhhh darling" Makes me puke.

Somehow, someday, someway I hope you can figure out how to finish a story properly.

I will say this, it was a better effort, so keep trying.

I love people with money...they think out of the box! I give you 3 thumbs up on this story. Oh yes I forgot...Money does by you happiness.!!

OK story.

Cindy was nothing more than a golddigger and whole father in law being outraged at her not wanting to keep taking his money was just bullshit.

She was straight with him. He understood. It worked out. I liked it. You got 5 ***** from me.

Over and over authors here show their lack of creativity by having the hero end up with the wife of the guy that cuckolded him. Can't anyone think up a different ending? Why you would want to be reminded of the man your wife cheated with by seeing his ex-wife every day of your life is beyond me, yet 3/4 of the authors here think that is a happy ending. I think it is a man's worst nightmare.

At least mikoli writes his own stories.

But I don't understand why Brad's father would have any reason to get upset that Cindy was remarrying. He struck the original deal so he could plant his son in Boston. He got what he wanted, kept his end of the bargain, and if her remarriage ended the deal then he no longer has to pay. It was a win-win for him.

Aside from that, I found the story had a very slender attachment to anything vaguely realistic. The only things missing from their 'electric' touch were fairy dust and an angelic choir.

You really need to work on your dialogue. Read it aloud and ask yourself--do people really talk like this? Better yet, ride a bus, sit in a cafe, and listen to how people talk.

Please write from Renee's point of view *****

The guy ended up in heaven because the wife cheated? It don't usually work that way!

Mikoli also writes fables. Almost NO gray showing. That is NOT a bad thing if you like Erotic Fables!

There were a few points which coulda (shoulda) been clearer. Dr. Rogers was a working physician who was also an heir to real money! His Sweetie's only finances came from Dr. Roger's income, plus any value his Rich Dad transferred...which may have been minimal...their house COULD have been provided by RD but titled in RD's name. So suing the Roger's estate may have been (probably would have been) fairly non-renumerative! Sweetie may have truly dependent on RD's beneficence, but that would be very a tenuous existence (at least as high Volunteer society!).

A 'early retired' man does NOT look at his accountant's monthly statements...ever? GMAFB! But they meet every Monday morning? GM2FBs!

The 'betrayal' by Renee was very weak! The 'betrayal' of Cindy was more prolonged but also an 'already accomplished fact' by a dead guy by the time the readers know about it. A story of two survivors of betrayal, but weak on the betrayals...BTW, it is difficult to imagine Cindy's catatonia given the status of their relationship!

This story makes no damn sense whatsoever.

First off, there's supposedly some love between Cynthia and Brad - which immediately goes out the window the second after they're married because she's a "lousy fuck" according to him and he becomes a serially cheating asshole?

And she has no problem with that, at all. Because she's actually not in love with him, but is secretly a gold-digging bitch waiting to get her bi-yearly Benz and all the other assorted trappings of living large?

And despite Brad's death, and their lack of love for each other, Brad's parents keep giving her money for no other reason than they apparently like her and she's still their son's widow? Even if she takes a lover, they love her enough to keep giving her money because she's keeping the family name?

So she tells them to go fuck themselves when her new man proposes to her? That's fucking cuntish backstabbing, turning on people that love and support you like that. Cynthia did absolutely nothing to earn that money. Ungrateful as hell.

Worse, is her new guy Martin, who apparently sees fit to destroy their finances simply because they raised their voices to someone they loved and considered their daughter-in-law. He's a bigger cunt than Cynthia is.

I *really* wanted to like and five-star this story because you were creative enough put the wife in the driver's seat and illustrated that it's not always the wife that's a cheating whore. But you've made all of your characters into completely unlikeable white trash which makes me want to one-star it. Two point five stars for the compromise and extra half star for creating an interesting story.

For those of you looking for realism, I advise you to find a non-fiction site. Mikoli writes fables, as was pointed out already by Lickideesplit. As far as fables go, this one is top tier.

5 Big Stars

An enjoyable tale told by a good story teller.

The only thing that I found odd, was that there was never anything mentioned about Cindy and Martin having any children, especially since Cindy was getting at the end of the prime age for her having children.

Thanks for the read.

father time and death puts them all even, TK U MLJ LV NV

No chance we will ever meet them but so what LOL

They had fun - I just read about it heh

Martin's lucky day was when Renee died.

Good story,well written and very readable,one gripe the word is crotch not crouch !!!

Not really the other woman, but a new direction. Good story.

Just after he touched Cindy. From that point on the writing/dialogue got silly, erratic, and way over rushed.

However, even that was better than her turning out to be a Gold Digger. By refusing his offers to marry him based on her perceived notions of his inadequate bank account to keep her in her lifestyle, that pretty much destroyed the story and her character.

I don't care how big the Chemistry Zap is, you simply DON'T, UNDER ANY CIRCUMSTANCES......OVERPAY FOR PUSSY aka shack up with Gold Diggers as they usually turn into Gold Digging Whores.

This story went from a solid 4, possibly 5 down to a 2. Sorry. Plus, like some other writers on here you have a great imagination and spin an awesome yarn but end up rushing the endings or even leaving them a tad early with too many loose ends not tied up. If you can clean the endings, plotlines, and sub-plots up a bit, you could easily be one of the better writers still left on Literotica. So many great ones have left it is just sad.

Ive called them the tingles. Had it happen 3 times in my life. Dont trust em. 3 times a woman has killed my soul beleving in them. Great story.5

Good finish, maybe justice served.

She’s a money grabber. He should’ve run. That part ruined it for me.

How Am I Supposed To Believe That.....

After getting two life insurance settlements, selling his wife's car, then buying a car and adding a garage to his double-wide trailer; then getting a 3 million dollar settlement which he got to keep 2 million of, how am I supposed to believe that he doesn't know how much he is worth, especially after his friend and his accountant friend has been investing it for him and probably getting quarterly statements showing him his wealth. It still blows me away how some of the stories on this site get anywhere near FOUR stars. But I did give it TWO stays though since it does have a couple of redeeming qualities to it.

she's a gold digger. I guess he's going for the trifikta, a whore, a gold digger and transgender man.

"He must be hung like a horse if he has all those women after him." At this point I baled out. Part one started well before going down the toilet and part two didn't even start well. If St Martin had become any more wonderful he would have had all the men in town hitting on him as well! Having a female character utter the sentence with which I opened this comment and having Martin become what he did combine to tell me that this author lives in his mother's basement.

"Why?" Why indeed!