by jealouscream
This is a first submission, thought the writing is pretty good, so who knows.
I quite enjoyed it, and don't know where it's going. I'llwait to hear what happens with interest.
Ta very much
I have often wondered why the subject of sick male humiliation often begins a new writers sordid efforts.<P>
I have come to believe that it is the subject that they can best write one handed in a moment of absurd excitement. This explains the brevity and lack of credibility in plot path.<P>
Kind of like the 101 primer from the London 2 day School of Self Cucksters and pub crawl. Leaking self disrespect from every pore they are one handedly crazed and think that they are the barometer of erotic fodder desired by more than a party of oneself.<P>
The smartened one's go home - seek help - tidy up their puter with 410 and go back to school for their GED - and at 17 they should.<P>
Such are the sad tales we are burdened with and sickened by. The oftentimes plus is that when their dawn comes they too wonder why they just had to embarrass themselves - again.
I liked it... Quirky, a bit kinky and fun. Yes, some things can be improved, but a good read. Look forward to more.
Don't make me laugh. You writer are now a cuck and a wimp enjoy your new lifestyle.
you could use a little bit of help with editing, but i loved the story, very hot.
deserves just what he has: A lying, cheating, rub your face in it and get sloppy seconds bitch. The writing was not terrible but lacked something to have the reader give a shit about either of them.
Hey, your tummy should be pretty round by the time he cums back from Alaska..... Ha!
How stupid do you think your husband is?
He could have checked her pussy out better if he ate her out. Suck her pussy to find out if she has any cum in her before he fucks her. I can hear him comforting her as he licks her pussy, telling her not to worry, that he will make her cum so she will be totally fucked. It's just too bad that her lover didn't get her to cum. I guess that is what her husband is for, making her cum when she doesn't cum from her lover. Thanks for the story........Rich
This is just as sexy reading for the second time as the first time. Thanks for sharing this very sexy post!
Why do you bother seperating paragraphs when you don't even seem to know how to separate dialog? Do us all a favor and run a magnet over your hard drive and smash your fingers with a large hammer, saves a keyboard and keeps you from putting shit like this up. Stick to reading Corky and leave the writing to those who can.
Is Ally retarted? If so not a humourous story! If not...kick her to the curb!
written so long ago and still no real conclusion. My guess is that he is a cuck and this was all part of a fantasy. Otherwise why would she call him and confess?