by Vampiric_Mirage
This is a good story! Now, I'll read the other installments over the next few days, hopefully these will be as intiguing and exciting as this...
Your story really drew me in and held me. Nice hook at the end, I definitely want to read more. Bravo!
You write beautifully. That was a most enjoyable read.
I thought it was absolutely awesome. Written beautifully.
... the use of 'You' as in me the reader, just didn't work for me, that does not detach from the fact that this was a good story and well written
I think the intriguing part about it was that it was written in first person with the other character being 'you' instead of just 'he.' This is probably the best story I've read online, but it seems as if there is more to come? I would thoroughly enjoy reading it.
the only thing that made me wonder was the 'cascade of curls', I was thinking wait? is this FF or MF? then of course you mentioned gender and I was happy that was the direction you were going! I can't tell if this is part of a series but this story definitely is going to make me look for more of your submissions.