All Comments on 'Without You I Have Nothing Ch. 21'

I feel I have just been to a wedding with all the pomp and ceremony. Is this nearing the end of the book? I doubt it as I feel so many clues have been told and so many loose ends to tie up.

The problem with long drawn out serials is that you need strong true to life characters to start with and while the language use and descriptions are well done, it still can not compensate for the mediocre plot and emotions displayed here. Somewhere there is the makings of a good story in here, maybe if the chapters were cut in half and a good EDITOR got their hands on the story it could be worth reading but at present it is mediochre at best.

The Characters are strong, the story is good and the telling is better.

The story is linear so far, with one event after the other in the same tone. Culling and reshaping to create an emotional peak in each chapter may do good and build the suspense. Angie

Like an old age home - endless conversations going round and round in circles. You really are deluded in thinking you can write a novel - this should be in the humor and satire section

This should be made mandatory reading for all poor souls who have to sit through lengthy board meetings – after a chapter or two of this masterpiece, that dry as dust report from the financial director suddenly sparkles with wit and charm. You should patent it.

In all seriousness – this is confused, it is boring and your plot wound up in the Bermuda Triangle

We have Plain Bob and now we have Plain Boring. At least some of Bob's stories are quire good. Maybe if the writer started of with a couple of short stories to learn from it wouldn’t have been so boring

The negative comments below are very similar to ones made after practically all the last ten chapters! If they think it is awful and do not enjoy why do they still read it?

<p> Perhaps they write their comments without reading the story!

<P> I have usually complained that Jennifer sounds more like an airy headed teen girl, than the experienced and capable lawyer she is supposed to be. Today I will complain

about our warrior who seems to be asking for trouble, or is that what you mean when you say the chapter is about "some

preparations"?

I thought that the preparations to be described would be about Peter identifying "Toad Face" and discovering everything possible about his "businesses" with an eye to sapping his cash flow and preparing him for slaughter. After what he said about Jennifer our Peter should have exploded and the martial arts expert would have gotten together with

the Major to organize a pre-emptive strike! Don't tell that he is going to let that ugly character become a serious problem!

Bruce22

he reason the story have such a loyal band of followers id calledEver wondered why the taller trees get more wind? Same applies here, if the author started out with some short stories, maybe even in the non-erotic category and took it from there he might have received a different response altogether. Long stories are for well established authors like Molly (Sweet witch) Longhorn or GaryAPB to name just a few. The Wanderer can produce very tight scrip lines. The wordplay was good but the plot so so with the characters …..enough said by previous posters . And the reason it has collected such a large following – it is called fascination of the horrible

Peter and his mother were abducted and held captive for a number of years. How would his mother’s diamond earrings and necklace survive, for him to pass to his wife? Their abductor was raping and blackmailing his mother before their capture. I’d expect their abductor to strip anything of value from their home, quickly after the ambush.