All Comments on 'Wood'

Just wanted to say this was a lovely little story and a great first time submission. You write well, please keep going.

Sincerely,

Green_Gem

Great first attempt. Keep em coming.

I have been reading this site for over a year and have been through the Top Stories submissions a couple of times. Your writing stands among the top three, if not the very best, of all those that I have read. Although not an English major in college, my profession has required a close and detailed attention to the language, and your writing is such a refreshing and enlightening experience in contrast to what ordinarily appears in these pages. Your use of phrase and verbiage is more than excellent and draws the reader (at least, this one) on with anticipation for the NEXT portion of the story.

To read someone who has enough emotional maturity to understand that once you place your story in print it is definitely as much for the reader's enjoyment as for the writer's (so often written very defensively by authors in these pages, "I just write for my own pleasure!"), is a true pleasure.

Thank you for your small gem (sized, only, because it is so short), and, please, write again and again, especially, if there is more for May and David to share.

For a first story, this was very well done. I'm impressed. And that's coming from a great crumudgeon. :kiss:

That was really lovely for a first time out. I thought you captured the feelings sowell.

just wonderful! I miss the words to describe what I want to say. I'm waiting for your next story.

any time out. Well written, well thought out, enjoyable and enthralling. I was impressed with the writing skill and the depth of emotions you pulled from your characters. So many people can't seem to find that and it leaves them with paper dolls instead of people. Great job.

Your story is a rare find scattered among the stroke stories, bodice rippers, and the stories only prisoners and the mentally disturbed could find amusing. Your story paints a picture with three-dimension characters, not the flat two-dimensional that 98% if the writing on this site contains. Thank you, great job!

What a good story. I agree with previous comments that this is indeed a contribution of rare quality. Both sensual and sexy; love the way you told it. You have set a high benchmark for yourself!

Sometimes a story reaches you. Thank you for your imagination.

What great writing, wonderfull story,this is to me what it is suppose to be about. Just not enough writers around with this talent. Thanks.

I love kissing in the rain! Great story, loved it!

Great !

Tasters' Choice instant coffee had a beautiful series of ads that ran on Canadian TV several years ago. It seemed to trace the development of a romance between two warmly attractive people, apartment neighbours.

Many Canadians (maybe the ads ran elsewhere, too) looked forward with anticipation to these ads, and watched them with great pleasure. I pictured these two people as I read the story, and my recollection raised my pleasure even beyond the supreme level that the story itself did.

Alas, the series of ads is at an end. I shall be very disappointed if this story is not the beginning of a charming - not to mention arousing - series.

Aurelian

Touching and lyrical. I look forward to reading more of your work. Good luck in the contest.

...you're an excellent writer. Nice balance! The character & background development was just right -- not wandering off into nonessential droning, while keeping enough well-chosen details to make these people real. That's when sex has a chance of becoming soulful -- of making the reader give a damn. Very well done! Hope you'll write lots more.

Your writing style is fantastic. The dialog was well-written and flows very smoothly. The story itself was easy to read - I had no problem imagining this actually happening. The references you made to nature during the erotic scenes were fun to read as well. Again, excellent story and I'm looking forward to more of your work.

We are all dying to hear about their next adventure

Heavy on characterization and metaphor - wonderful tale! Some of the word choices weren't my cup o' tea, but that couldn't detract from the strength of the story. Good luck in the contest!

Dark/LesLumens

A truly worthy submission. I imagined reaching out to stroke the warm wood; I could smell the scent of life in the greenhouse, and I watched with glee as David and May kissed in the rain. Thank you!

What a wonderful story. Writing style, characters, pacing - and something I can't put my finger on that drew me right in. I'm looking forward to your next submission.

Wow! Your diction came alive from the screen when I read it! I loved this story! Best of luck in the contest.

What a lovely story. Succinct, alive, tender & truly wonderful. Superb talent. it would be a joy to read another episode of this story, or a new story. The tale is as delicate as the white flower given from one lover to her partner.

I love it!!!

This story is incredible. I have never read a story of its quality. It brought my imagination to life and left me wanting more. You have an amazing talent for writing.

... That was head and shoulders above a lot of things I've read, even from more experienced writers. Keep it up! I look forward to more.