by LaLaLou
You shouldn't put yourself down it made sense and I quite enjoyed it, hope you can re-ignite your drive to complete the story, I'd really like to ream more.
please add more to this wonderful start that you have created i would love to see where you take this story...you are a great writer dont sweat the editing if the story is good most dont notice because to busy reading...i myself edit poetry for living and for fun so i notice but i can still enjoy the work is written the right way