All Comments on 'You Sinner!'

by charmingdanger

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SatyrDickSatyrDickalmost 2 years ago

Excellent!

11/10 Locks of Hair!!!!!

superfeluously_esuperfeluously_eover 8 years ago
pretty good

I think this story could have used a little more back story. It was very quick and I thought succubi killed or drained energy from their "victims."

I also thought the guy sounded a lot like a child, not sure the reasoning for this. Then he complained about being a demon breeder. Again some back story might have helped because to me, his immediate proclamation about this sounded weird and out of place.

Then out of the blue you throw in his lusting of his niece...It was a short story with a whole bunch of things thrown together. But I must say your writing is overall pretty good - good imagery and action scenes, the dialogue like I said was a little weird.

Thanks for posting!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago

A sequel to this would be fantastic, IMO.

Corpse_riderCorpse_rideralmost 13 years ago
Sucker for a succubus

A well written succubus tale.

Nice n' sleazy.

mBrowmBrowalmost 13 years ago
Very good story!

Nicely written, too, I thought. And the decadent nature of the seduction simply adds to the eroticism. Thanks, charmingdanger!

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