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Click here- My cutie! - Kido pulled his free hand to him and kissed him on the temple.
Then his finger slipped inside the body of his brother. Akio flinched, but as quickly as possible leaned back, letting Kido stretch his tight ring of muscle. After a few minutes he added another finger, and Akio moaned softly, his hands clutching his brother's shoulders.
- That's enough. Enough for today - Kido took out his fingers, and then stroked his hardened tummy lovingly. - Let's sleep a little more.
- No! - Akio slightly bent, picked up the member of his brother and fidgeting a little, slowly began to fall on him.
When the big head just entered in his body, Akio groaned and bit his lip. It was much more than fingers, so he was in pain.
- Ooh ... - Kido froze.
The younger brother fell down sharply, taking the member until the end, and dug his nails into Kido's chest, leaving deep bleeding scratches on his body. Staying for a few seconds and adjusting to the feeling of tightness and the heat inside, Akio began to move slowly.
- He ... it's so big ... mmm ... brother! - The boy started to gather momentum, more and more deeply taking the member of his brother, who was moving his hips. - So hot ... inside ...
Kido, without stopping, turned over, and the younger was under him. Kido then spread his legs apart. Now his cock could enter as deep as possible, caressing sensitive parts of his body. Jacking off the firm flesh of his younger brother, Kido gladly watched blushing Akio.
- Do you like it, Akio? - Kido bent down onto his ear, biting his earlobe and strengthening the hip movements.
- Yes, yes, brother! - The boy turned his head and greedily kissed his brother, tongue penetrating inside. - Oh, brother! More!
- How insatiable you are! - Kido took his dick out and Akio looked at him. - Come here!
The senior put the boy on all fours, and entered with a single move. Akio arched his back, and began to move toward him. Kido moved his hands on his cock at the same furious pace, which inevitably pushed them to orgasm.
- Brother, no ... do not touch it ... I am now ... - Akio grabbed the sheets. - No ...
- I want to see you cum. Your face ... - Kido picked up his brother and sat him down on his laps, his cock quickly slid into the hot flesh that is more tightly clutching his head. - Relax a little, baby brother!
- I cannot, I'm ... - Akio arched up in the hands of his brother, groaned, and then sank his teeth into his shoulder.
Hot jets of semen splattered on the bellies of the two brothers.
- Bad brother! - Kido clenched Akio's thighs sharply penetrated his cock up to his ass.
Gradually, his thrusts became ragged and chaotic. Having made a couple of pushes, Kido groaned, and Akio immediately felt something hot pouring inside. Exhausted, the brothers fell on the bed and Kido began to cover with the kisses the face, neck, shoulders of Akio.
- I'm sorry, I'm sorry, baby. I found it hard to hold back. Were you hurt?
- No, - the little boy stood up, and his face was directly above the torso of his brother. - Oh, I made you dirty!
His little tongue was diligently licking cum from the hips and abdomen of Kido, leaving a wet track on the navel, muscles of the abdomen and chest. Akio did not forget about nipples Kido. Incorporating them into his mouth, he enthusiastically sucked each, and then bit a little.
- Well, that's enough! - Kido grabbed his brother's wrist, when Akio grabbed his groin. - We need a break!
The elder brother covered their bodies with a blanket and put his junior to his chest. It was wrong and not normal, Kido understood it, but now it did not matter. Now, when the new day, a new morning came...
It's quite riveting and though there were parts I couldn't follow it was definitely interesting and entertaining. I would love to read more of this story
What makes you think anyone wants to read about rape? >:(
come on people. If the writer is not a native English speaker, I consider it a service that he actually tried, NOT TO BE PATRONISING. besides that, liked the plot-based style and use of emotions in the story.
This story is beautiful and intense. It feels so much like anime and your descriptions paint vivid pictures. Do not be discouraged by any comments on here - you do have a gift for writing and you will only strengthen your English skills by writing more! I want to read more of your work! Please write more :)
diabolicfeline, the commenters aren't referring to professional editors, they're referring to volunteer editors, available without charge through this site.
Some of you people are fools. Do you suppose the writer is going to hire an editor for a story for which he (I assume he, given the username Adonis) is not going to get paid? The story was beautifully constructed even if English is rather evidently not the author's first language. The style was very reminiscent of erotic anime. One can constructively suggest to the author that they may need to work on their English skills without being rude.
There were some errors in the story. You could probably use an editor to help you with additional chapters or stories. If did not find the story awful. If you had fleshed out more of the background story and drawn out the events in the story it would ave been better. Please don't stop writing without giving yourself time to refine the craft. Good luck as you continue to write and remember that most of the people ago comment on your story never had the talent, time, or guts to write one themselves.
If so, it's probably of a version of English I'm unfamiliar with. But I suspect that, like me, you're just someone who writes in a language they love but don't quite control. If this is the case, it is no reason to stop; Conrad and Nabokov weren't native either and did pretty well after all :). However, native or not, you definitely should use a good editor. There are many kind volunteers in this community and I think you should try and contact someone, possibly via the comments to this submission, ideally before publishing the next installment. With my best wishes.
The story its self was good but you seriously need an editor for your work.