All Comments on 'Zinnia Blossoms Ch. 01'

Your build up is nice.

Nice characterization.

But you leave things incomplete like

-when shally wrongly accused Dane there shoud

have been some apologies.

-there should have been some conversation as twins saw their mom in the bar.

Next time fill in all details and post a completed story you will get a 5 insteadof 3.

Thank you for your comment, Anonymous.

I see your points but I don't see the story as being incomplete as a discrete tale - sometimes siblings *don't* apologise and the story, written from Zinnia's point of view, doesn't include the twins' private reactions to seeing her at the bar.

The next part, however, is written from the *twins'* point of view. Over several stores the whole picture will build up. Slowly but surely.

-- Thermite

Thank you for writing this excellent enjoyable story. Looking forward to reading more of your work.

How could this possibly rate a score of anything les than a perfect "5"? One of the best I have EVER read at Lit, both from a heat rating and a technical perspective (grammar, pacing, all that stuff)

Extraordinary. Please, may we have another?

The story had excellent buildup, very strong well developed characters were introduced in the first story. Absolutely believable with impeccable grammar leading to the culmination of the writing. .

Oh hell, this is all frigging wonderful!